Okay, this chapter kind of threw me completely off. I felt like I was starting to get to know Jane in the previous chapters, got to figure out a little bit of her back story when all the sudden the POV changed on me. It was nice in a sense to get to know a little bit of Jason's back story although I'm slightly confused. Is he a demon or is he a vampire, or are the two mixed together as one? I think it would run more smoothly picking a character and sticking with that person.

This was a good start. I definitely want to see where this story goes. It felt a bit choppy and left me confused. I guess it would help to understand why she is so disliked so much.

I like your story so far, the only thing that I would suggest is proof read/edit it before you post (or have someone else edit it for you).

I like your story so far, the only thing that I would suggest is proof read/edit it before you post (or have someone else edit it for you)

The last sentence about the centaur made me burst out laughing. Everything just couldn't go perfect, now could it? :D It was a nice chapter and it just confirmed my suspicions that Eve is absolutely blind to what is happening around her and what peole ae thinking.

Gaah.. I really do hate Jason. He's destroying the happy ever after I want to see! Adan only acts cool, cold an indifferent he actually cares about those around him while Jason is cruel, stone-hearted and uncaring. He's a monster who only cares about Eve not a living thing more! And the girl herself is so blind! I want to go there and do something to her! Why can't she see that Adan is a prince charming under the mask of arrogant jerk and Jason a demon (not only literally) under the mask of the gallant knight?

An interesting chapter. It was fun to read how Eve was always scared of everything and kept holding onto Adan as if he was the one to protect her while at the same time trying to assure herself that she hated him. And Jason is finally back. Too soon for my liking. :D

Solid chapter, I felt so bad for Angie Dx It was great seeing things from Hollie's perspective as well, it really helped establish her character.

You showed Hollie in the whole new light this chapter.. When Jason first mentioned her I thought of her as some monster or something along those lines but now I can see that she's something else entirely. She's so motherly and nice! I'd like to have her as my sister :D

It's funny how Eve denies (or at least tries to) her feelings to Adan.

Also I'm interested in what place is Adan taking her and if she will really like it. Anyway I really hope Jason won't show up there and destroy everything.

Aw... The end of the chapter was so sweet... I liked this chapter: it was full of emotions and they were showed very well in my opinion.

Interesting chapter. It shows a lot about Jason's personality and that somewhy leads me to thinking that he's more of a monster than Adan is. I'm not sure of that by I get the feeling that he's more cruel and evil even if he cares for Jane (Evelynn)

Awesome story. I really enjoyed reading it. Adan is my favourite character and i really hope eve stays with him .

I like it so far, but I think it would be in your best interest to get a beta reader :) I'll continue reading!

L.L.B

Who's POV is this? I think you'll confuse people if you don't put the name or say its in a different POV. I certaintly was confused.

This was interesting and I can't wait for more.

-Elf