WHAT?! THAT was the ending you chose? UGH! At least write a sequel where she gets her memory back or something... I spent two nights staying up late reading this story that sucked me into the suspense of Electra's life, and then the ending resulted in me wanting to cry. You even left the perfect opening for a sequel to fix your depressing and abrupt ending... please? You are an amazing story creator (with the plot, characters and climax), you just need an amazing ending to go with it. You spend so much creativity writing the drama and twists, why can't there be a crazy ending where Electra actually is allowed some good or happiness? It would make everything she went through worth it, but as the ending is now, it feels depressing and abrupt... I REALLY hope you keep writing with this story. It would make me love this story instead of left me wanting more. ;-) Either way keep up the creativity and imagination.

You need to write a sequel! Please don't leave me hanging.

I think that this is a truly amazingly intricately written story. I absolutely love the depth of your characters, a lot of times I feel like characters in some stories are fake and one sided. However, your characters, specifically Electra, are very complex and real characters. I love this story and have been hooked reading it. Another thing, which might not seem like such a big deal but I feel is crucial when I am reading a story is that your grammar is correct. If there is one thing I cannot stand when reading something is when some has tons of spelling and grammatical errors. In short, your story is wonderful and truly a great read! You are a very talented writer and I would certainly recommend your story to anyone. Please, continue to write because it's writers like you that make me love to read!

Amazing story! I have to say though, the beginning was a little... um... rough, shall we call it? I watched as your writing improved throughout the story though, which was interesting for me to see.
A general tip: you need punctuation before all ending quotations and at the end of all paragraphs. I noticed that a lot of those spots lacked punctuation.
I'm sorry about this next part... my thoughts get confusing, even to me, so it'll be a bit rough.
There's one thing I don't quite understand: how does Electra finally understand that what her aunt would always tell her was propper? It seemed like she had changed her whole view of witches because she loved Angel. It was nice that you put his father in at the end there though to show other witches and how they acted. . Anyway, I think it would be nice for the readers to understand why her view on witches changed and feel that way themselves. It was also interesting how we could see where he'd gotten the stereotype for gypsies from. in your finished version, maybe you could expand on that a bit? There's also something else I don't understand: how could she bring some dead things back and not others? did they still have to be slightly alive or fighting to be alive in order for her to bring them back? I also liked the name that you had for her origional form. I'm not sure how you chose it, but from what I know, Phoebe is the Greek goddess of Light, and I think she was supposed to be really pure and such, so it seems cool to me. It would have been interesting to see what caused witches to find out and kill the other people whose name escapes me right now... it could have been the other way around if the witches had died. the world could have been much better. it would be interesting to see how that happened because I know that if I were in their shoes I would have killed off the witches while I had a chance, so maybe they were distracted... or maybe I'm looking too far into this. *takes a breath* sorry. I'll shut up now. XD
I'd love to see a propper version of this story when it's done! It's like I'm left on a cliffie. Poor Electra...
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx

YAY! You acknowledged me ahaha. Well this has been fun. I really enjoyed reading this entire story. It's still a shock that it came to an end. And it's definitely a twist that it ended with Electra not being well...Electra. Great job! I look forward to reading more stories from you. You make my writing seem like a kindergarten wrote it :)

Love it! I wonder who the girl is. Great work :)

Wonderful epilogue and you better continue the story! Ahaha jk, but really, I would love to read more. I really like this.

*GASPS* I can't believe this story is over :( I can't believe that Electra is well, not Electra. I do have to admit, that was quite a twist on the story. Most stories end with a happy ending, this one however, ending more of on a sad note. Aw, and poor Angel. If I were him, I would have cried knowing that the girl that I love is no longer herself. Wonderful job!

:O
...omgomgomgomg I'm speechless right now
I mean I really don't even know what to say
right now

...I cannot believe you just wrote that your story sucked? Um, hello! This is one of the best stories I've ever read on fiction press. And that's coming from someone who is more into spiritual/religious/or native american things. Usually I don't even think twice about reading any stories that have to do with magic, but this one sucked me in. I wouldn't know if it's publishing worthy though, I've never actually had a book published (I guess, I'm just not a good enough writer for that yet). But yeah, I this is an extremely late response to that, I realize this, but still. I'm just letting you know :)

OM MY! What is going on here? Now I really have to find out what's going on! Wonderful job. I would write a longer review but I really want to read the next chapter.

OMG! YAY FOR THE BURNS CLAN! This chapter had me on the edge of my feet! So much suspense, I had given up hope on anyone making it out alive. Great work!

OMG I HATE MEL SO MUCH! I really hope his soul gets sent to hell. Never the less, wonderful job on this! I've really been enjoying all the chapters so far and just one last thing: ANGEL BURNS? HE BETTER NOT BE DEAD NOOOOO ELECTRA AND ANGEL ARE GOING TO LIVE HAPPILY EVER AFTER! THEY HAVE TO!

AMAZING JOB! UGH IM SOOOO MAD AT MEL AND Emilia needs to just shut up. She's so annoying. Yay, Caster to the rescue! Ahahaha, I will forever love Caster! :D

WHAT THE! NOOOOOOO! THIS CANNOT BE HAPPENING! Although when I was reading the beginning of this chapter, I did think that it would end up being Mel as the traitor because I noticed his sudden change in personality. But Electra could not have died could she? Oh my gosh I hope she didn't die. She can't die. I refuse. Thumbs up for having finally admit that she loves Angel. I knew it all along :) Awesome job! Love it!