LOVE IT SOOOOO MUCH my parents probably think I'm crazy, since I'm laughing so hard at 10 at night in my bed, yep they think I'm crazy

that was seriously funny. (understatement) she's so... random. damn it. hilarious. i know. articulate, aren't i? funny stuff does that to me.

Well, you wanted reviews, so I'm gonna be honest.

1. Establish the main character's gender earlier. Up until she peppersprayed the other guy I thought she was a guy too.

2. Joy's "random" bits were not very random at all. For future reference, "random" things that are WAY overused: space, aliens, bananas, monkeys, sweets (ice cream, cookies, etc.), tacos, mexican food in general, cheese, cats.

3. I think people pee once every 4-6 hours or so. The longest I've been able to go is about 8. I think it's nearly impossible to healthily go 3 days (I can't remember how long they were in there) without peeing at all. Same thing goes for defecating - if they had eaten a full meal the day they fell in, and continued to eat while in the hole, one of them would have most likely pooped.

4. The dialogue seems a bit unrealistic. I can't pin exactly what it is, but Adam's dialogue just seems like it's not what an 18 year old guy would really say in the situation. But perhaps the 18 year old guys you know are different than the ones I know.

Interesting premise, but I'd do a bit more research about animal traps and what exactly people do when they get stuck down holes.

I think this counts as spam, but I really, really, really, really, really, really, REALLY love the part about the twig. ...but I should probably PM you instead of leaving a multitude of reviews...?

...Would this be considered spamming?

On the other hand, this story is still just as hilarious as before, even though it through me for a very large and very confusing loop... :D

...Yep, I'm going insane. It's not on my list of faves...

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But I remember it so clearly...

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Did you delete this and then repost it?

*Please save me from insanity and respond, please, please, please*

...I reviewed this, didn't I? I faved it too...

Didn't I? Am I going crazy?

But I'm pretty sure I did...

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Didn't I?

I DISTINCTLY REMEMBER FAVING IT! Hmm...I'm going to go check and see if I'm insane or not...or if I was just dreaming about reading it and faving it...

This story was amazing. I was grinning the whole time I read it, that's how funny it was. (I kept hoping no one would walk in and see my goofy expression...) Joyce's random tangents and accusations of pedophilia (?) were hilarious and Adam was so cute. And less normal than he first appeared... I mean, tearing up all the leaves...? Ookaay...?

Anyway, good job on writing such an entertaining story.