Beautiful wording, I enjoyed reading this piece. Its such a deep and dark description of despair. I'm sure we all have experienced this before. Once again, great job! I hope to read more from you!

Brilliant! You've written another masterpiece for the Fictionpress archieve. Amazing!

All of a sudden, I'm finding poems about how I sometimes feel. Very relatable poems. :D

I liked how you had one word that rhymed with every other word in the whole story/poem (not sure what to call it XD).

-Hermie

P.S. Is the picture for this story supposed to be Ophelia from "Hamlet"? It looks like it. :P

Amazing- yet again you've done a fantastic job here.

Dark and sad, but well written. I like it!

I know this feeling. You've described it well. I really like the look of this poem, too. It's got an interesting shape on the page.

you have a beautiful way with words. great work. I love it. totally going into my favorites..

Very good. This has a strong but delicate touch that makes us feel the despair without being drawn too deeply into it.

Slightly disturbing (lol) but otherwise a beautiful poem. You're really talented. Honestly, great job.

I love the alliteration, "desperate despair"

Something like, despairingly desperate, or I'm not sure. Its just giving me ideas. I liked it, good job.

With words you have crafted a mind blowing perspective on this. Thank you for sharing it with the world.

I realy like this poem, it has so much emotion and it's very relatable. I also like your vocabulary and word choice :)

Aw... I've been here before, but I've never known how to word it as well as you just did. That was perfect.