|Reviews for At the End of Everything|
| fleurmort 6/18/13 . chapter 14
I usually don't review until the end of stories, or at least the most recent chapter...but i'm in tears. The good kind, the kind you get when something is so well written and so well thought out that you feel everything and it hurts. I cannot praise you enough for this series, I can't find words to tell you how wonderful it is. I hope for a happy ending. I'm not a fan of happy endings, but I've become so enamored with your characters and how spectacularly they have developed, that I would be so lost if something beautiful didn't come out of this. At least a bit of closure. But honestly, I would love any kind of ending, because I feel a good piece of writing is supposed to hurt, it's supposed to make you feel something strong. Your work does exactly that plus more, and now I'm so invested in it. I cannot wait to read the next sixteen chapters and I hope there will be more. I do apologize for the long review/rant, but I just want you to know that you have so much talent, and thank you so much for sharing it with us readers. I must be a masochist, because I love and adore the ache I get when I read this and I can't get enough of it. Keep it up, you're marvelous.
| whotevar 6/14/13 . chapter 30
This was excellent, thank you very much for sharing.
| PinkHart 5/28/13 . chapter 30
I've been gone. Well, not really gone. I've been reading but haven't kept up with telling you how good I though lt you were doing. Classes are over so this summer I'm all yours to read and comment and enjoy whatever you write :)
Now for this story! It's so good. Really.
Remee has grown so much. He's grown but kept so many parts of him too. His love for Julian is one of those things. I started to think, maybe Remee was too single minded. Too focused on Julian to make proper decisions for himself but that's not the case. He's learned a lot from being alone. From loving other people too.
I love Crash. I'll always love him. Maybe even a little more than Julian (ah!) but I'm glad it ended the way it did when it comes to that. Romeo never did feel the same about Crash and I accept that now lol
I like Kay too. I almost wish I got to see more of her.
I wish Id gotten to know Remee's dad too. I feel like he's been on a long hard journey too. I'm glad he turned out to be a good guy
Hmm what else? I don't know lol
I loved this story. And if you were bold enough to go for another squeal then I'll be a happy camper lol
Thank you so much for sharing this with us
| JHeartbreak 5/26/13 . chapter 30
Hey there, sorry I haven't been around. But I'm here and I've read the chapter: here are my thoughts.
I like the imagery a lot. You know how much I like that stuff. And there's a cool sense of... sensuality to the complete relationships going on too. It's all very good.
Something seems off to me, though... I guess all of this stuff doesn't have much to do with the rest of the story. It seems less of a real ending to what came before, as a kind of movement away from. Not running away, like I worried, but suspending the real confrontation with the past. It's like the things that made Remee and Julian so achingly bound to London and homelessness just dissolved. It doesn't feel like you've wronged their characters, but it does feel like you've hollowed them out a little.
I don't know, I'm just trying to put my finger on this sensation I get. And then with the song lyrics you added on the end... was the whole chapter just inspired by that song? Or, in other words, were you leaning on your associations with the song rather than whatever well of inspiration had given you the other parts of the story?
So, I like this chapter, but I do feel a bit disappointed. I can't say it would have been an easy thing to end this story though, and I'm still 300% impressed with "At the end" as a whole.
Incidentally, I was listening to Brian Eno's "Another Green World" while reading this chapter, which was a good choice.
| lightstheway 5/25/13 . chapter 30
This review has been a long time coming! Sorry to keep you waiting for so long!
I'm really happy with the way you decided to end this story. Of course, everybody loves a happy ending, but it's not just that. I can buy this. I think I sensed (maybe I'm wrong) that you were struggling with giving your characters a happy ending that was realistic and believable. I think you found that—I think your characters found that they could trust one another, and wait, and take the long view.
I can picture the very last scene in my head, and I think it's absolutely perfect. Julian's request was so beautiful and fitting; it really moved me. I think, after all this time, he is exhausted from holding things together, and wants to be held. Not just that: he used to be aggrieved by a perceived lack of sexual agency, and being in control was safer for him, psychologically. Now that he is away from all that, he can begin to embrace vulnerability.
I want to come back to the point about trust. In a way you can view all of this story as a narrative about trust: in the beginning, Remee puts Julian on a pedestal. Then, when Julian falls, Remee has to reassess. He has a crisis of faith, where he doesn't know whom to trust, while Julian is away. Meanwhile, Julian has only relied on himself the whole while. He sees Remee as his responsibility, which is a far cry from trusting him as an equal partner. When the cafe is burned down, it's more like what was left of his faith in the world is shattered. Remee finding him again must seem like a miracle, an act of God. This is the point where he begins to let himself trust again, however reluctantly. Once he gets through withdrawal, he realizes that Remee will always come back to him. The temporary separation that follows sets them up for a lifetime together.
You have here a beautiful and moving story. These characters have the power to endear themselves to anyone who reads about them. Congratulations on reaching the end.
| heyitsstupidme 5/20/13 . chapter 30
I love the ending. I'm so glad Remee still has contact with Kay and Crash and lives with Julian in their own little home. I especially liked the last sentence. And this song by Patrick Wolf really suits the image of Remee's and Julian's home in my head. Thank you for this wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it so much.
| Elfie in the sky 5/20/13 . chapter 30
Oh my god. that was the most moving story i have ever read! that could be published, you have so much talent.
I love the depth and complexity of your characters, and by the end i felt as if i knew them. especially Remee, i felt very...attached to him in a way!
| Happy Hippie 5/19/13 . chapter 30
Beautiful last sentence, oh my God... The way that one sentence makes me feel pretty much sums up how I feel about your writing as a whole. It's just incredible.
I'm not going to pick things apart, there's no point. For every small detail that feels just a little bit awkward to me there are fifteen that are exactly right. This is an indescribably magical story and you should be so, so proud of yourself.
- Jessie -
| Aletiah 5/19/13 . chapter 30
A beautiful ending! I'm so glad that Remee could have them all - both Julian and Crash and Kay. And his dad, even though he's still suspicious. I think anyone would be. This ending had everything a reader could have asked for. It's realistic and wonderful both.
I always love when the author have the title of the story in the story too.
Thank you for writing this, I'm looking forward to read more from you!
| sleepyreader 5/19/13 . chapter 30
That was a bittersweet ending. I was afraid of Juilan dying and I'm glad he didn't. Great work!
Can we have a oneshot of Remee finally meeting his dad?
| TheHobbitOfCandyland 5/18/13 . chapter 30
Oh my, I'm in tears. I cannot believe this is over, but I can't think of a better ending than this. (': I am so glad I got to go on this wonderful journey. If you haven't thought about getting this story published (along with the first one, of course), then it's time you start thinking about it now. Honest to god, I got into this story way more than I ever have when I read a real book. This story and the one before it were the greatest stories I have ever read, and that is the complete truth. I hope to see more of you soon, my dear. I would love to hear from you if you ever decide to create a new story. I'm always looking for a new adventure to go on. (: Thank you so much for making writing this.
Diana A huge admirer.
| Bananafishh 5/18/13 . chapter 30
Bravo Honunjama. You made it and you did it beautifully. Well done :) xxxxxxxxx
| DawnSister 5/18/13 . chapter 30
I'll PM you
| Chrislovesstories 5/14/13 . chapter 29
Heyy I can't see the chapter 29, it's not showing. Lol
| JHeartbreak 5/12/13 . chapter 29
Hey, nice chapter. I thought it was really good. Not as good as your tops chapters, but still a great chapter.
I like it partly because your treatment of this whole excursion is very even-handed. I don't feel like you're deliberately making things simpler than they are in order to have a nice pat ending. That's what I was worried about before. No, it seems like you're giving it what it needs. The fact that the ending is still up in the air just speaks to that power.
I especially liked the part with Kay. It was both very surprising and very believable.
Julian's withdrawal, if that's what it is, is cool in two respects. Firstly, it's what makes the portrayal so balanced; having the withdrawal means they aren't living a gypsy dream. But it also makes a nice parallel with the beginning, when Remee was sick and they were wandering around.
My only beef with the chapter is that the locations aren't very fully realized. Like the station, even though you mentioned it was only barely light out, I didn't get that fully until the line about artificial lighting, which came a ways into the scene. And the rural area seems also pretty lightly sketched out. It's just that I would get so much out of a fuller realization of these settings, and it would tie them into the world of the story much better.
"the station names are like places from dreams" is really beautiful, but maybe a little romantic for a very practical problem? There just seems to be a little bit of a disconnect between the practical, logistical problem, and the description, as if you're trying to purple it up on purpose.
"a comic hoard of police cars" - I think this is a great touch, I can visualize it immediately and it strikes me as the perfect thought for Remee to be having at the moment. I think you meant horde - though it might be better to leave it as hoard.