So my OC's are working for someone eh? seems cool. on another note PLEASEDON'TKILLMEOFFSUPEREARLY! okay? i did enjoy the chapter, quite a bit of a wait, though who am i to complain? good chapter *hopes for quick update*

Well, this is interesting. Who is Dardonos, and what does he want with Aira?

Less of the 'old witchy hag', thank you, Aira. Lucrezia's only twenty (and she's not that bad really).

Aira's personality is quite interesting along with how she deals with people. Is it because she is simply like this or is it because she was barely outside and had interaction with others? It was nice of you to incorporate character that your readers came up with.

-Zoe1013

I see that Aira's vampire attributes started to surface, so it makes me wonder if her werewolf side will show up soon as well. Anyways, it was a nice read.

-Zoe1013

Wow, Aira knows just the right way to get on someone's bad side, doesn't she? XD She actually reminds me a lot of Ciel from Black Butler.

Can't wait to find out just what Hell's Moon is, and to also see my character. Take your time, but I hope you can update soon! :D

Baby BlueJay

Great story development and descriptions! Look forward to future chapters!

Good job! Whatever happened to her werewolf-y side? Very excited for the next chapter!

Interesting start. I can't wait to read the rest (Which I will do IF the character I submitted is accepted).

hey man... its me, i think u would know. Anyways i read it and its pretty good, but u do repeat details/descriptions occassionaly. soo... yeah

Awww...poor Arlette. This is getting good! Still needs some more details though...but at least you added some more! Anyway, keep writing!

I think the actual lines look fine, as in, the ones that are in this chapter. I'll admit the (line) method was a bit annoying sometimes, though.

Any who, I really like your story, it definitely has some potential and some interesting characters to it. I feel like Arlette's death was a bit out of the blue, and I wonder how it will effect the other characters and the main conflict. Of course, I will say that the twins thing is a tad overused, it could be interesting if done in a unique way.

Other than that though, I am a fan of this story and I will certainly keep reading. :) Good job.

Wow...epic ending! Still needs more details though! I have no idea what the other minor characters look like; just the main. Nor do i know how the castle and the area surrounding the castle looks like.
Anyway, I love the plot!

Whoa this is getting heated. But could you add more details and describe the background and scenery? The chapters seem too short and too quick without the descriptions of the background.
Also the king's an ass.
Queen:"Did you or did you not have an affair while I was gone?"
King: "Ah. I thought I heard somebody outside. Turns out it was my own daughter."
Fucking idiot! He sounded all mellow about it too!
Anyway good chapter!

Oh shit! How was that BORING!? Tht was dramatic! And will Aila ever come into the story? And her father is douche. He really is...

But wait Arlette's half phoenix right? don't phoenix's get reincarnated or something? Update soon maybe...?