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That's beautiful. You did a great job giving depth to such a short type of poem. It's kind of like an imagist poem- super short but takes so long to finish with because it makes you see the images.

I don't like the bold/underline with this because the image clashes the strong fierce grappling hooks the structure gives. It somewhat deters me from the poem.

I again like the more subtle contradiction of this haiku because it's not something I see alot of. The away/into work really well, particularly how you have a settling place in between that could be anywhere with the large expanse of sky. The subtelty really works here to bring out this image nice and gently (ignoring the formatting).

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I like how you've bolded and underlined this poem because it makes the theme of this haiku really stand out, making it hard and strong and somewhat painful to the eyes when you're on the RM. :) Good thing I was out all afternoon/night otherwise this contrast would kind of hurt my eyes while writing this review.

I don't like the lack of punctuation again because the ideas, unlike the last one, read quite separetely and yet you've mushed them together with no distinction which somewhat dulls the strong effect you had. Some dashes or something would have really helped with it.

I like the repetition of the sound "fa-" because it gives a nice gentle serene image, like a feather floating slowly downwards. It's a nice peaceful image.

I also like the subtelty of the comparison in this one because it works very well, both as a sensible statement without going out of your way to illustrate the contradiction as well as making it unnecessary to have any change in the flow or punctuation.

I like the choice of contrasting images here because the wind and stars compared to each other like this isn't something I've seen before, but you've made it a good combination of sound and touch and that uniqueness is very appealing.

I don't like though how there's no difference between the pauses after the first and the second line because it serves to dull the contradiction in comparison to the description that furthers the stars.

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I REALLY liked this one!

I like this, made me think bout a western movie with cowboys
sorry for my review on wolf chapter 7, my coumputer went crazy

zzz

makes me think bout watchin stars at night

Hiya,

I'm usually only on but I recently started lurking around on fictionpress.

Love your haikus. Just love them

xoxo

These are so good! I think this one is the best because it creates a very clear picture in my head. :)

You're very good at writing haiku! I especially love this one, by the way. :)

These are really good. I've never really been huge on haikus but you have done a very good job of them. i reall liked the random DS one. lol made me smile. You have done a really good job at making the pieces pictures of one something, and not random and all over the place. Very good haikus. Good job. :)

I wasn't sure to comment on this one or the previous one but here it is! I like your haiku work. You don't see many people sticking really well to that format. I enjoyed it :)