Awesome! You need to write more. ;)

This is really good. The grammar needs some touch-ups, but it's really really good. Thank you. You made today special.

This is really good! I really like it! You need to write more in it.:) keep up the good work!:D

Very good, all the chapters flow together perfectly and the characters are brilliant!

Wow, great chapter. Just amazing :P
First of all dastan is the sweetest guy ever yet at the same time tough in a way. Hes just plain adorable and I love his dialogue, esspecially in this chapter. Another thing I wanted to point out was mickeys little thought analysing stuff lol or whatever you call it. It was very realistic and definately showed her confusion and conflicting emotions. AMAZING JOB! ONTO THE NEXT CHAPTER! XD

awww thats so sweet! good character development for dastan too, i mean the fact that hes good with little just one more thing to make mickey like him even more ;P nect chappie.
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hey, good job! the whole crush thing is progressing very well, and i loved their little moment. even though i was hoping they would kiss or something, it was a good thing they didnt. i feel like they need to wait and become closer, but the little moment was a perfect thing to add just to show that she is starting to like him now. next chapter! :P
-steph135

:P AWWW. that ending was so sweet. dastan is so sympathetic toward her, and yet so adorably unaware! (sigh) sooooo cute! poor mickey though. i dont blame her for freaking out, this whole thing must suck for her. my fave part of this whole chapter though was these lines:"I look at him hard in the eyes and don't say another word. He locks eye contact with me and for a moment I wonder if he can actually feel my pain. If he understands all of the things that are hidden under that sentence." this automatically made me go back and read that sentance over again. once i did, i understood. poor micky, im just glad dastan was able to cheeer her up alittle in the end! welp, onto the next one :P
-steph135

hey, nice chapter! it felt short, but that's probably because i enjoyed it! i just love the idea of a secret room that hardly anyone knows about! i dont blame mickey for getting excited about that, and im glad she did. its nice to see her happy, which im sure she probably would be more often if it hadnt been for disney lol. its strange though how dastan knows about her love for animals...hm. something to think about.
i feel like this is also the chapter mickey starts to have small, miniscule feelings for this guy. :P i love it! l really like him as a chracter. he seems serious, yet sweet, and almost like a kid, but in an adult type of way, you know what i mean? i like mickey to, even though shes not perfect (no charactor should be, cause when they are, its kind of annoying) i love how shes alittle sarcastic, but she seems like shes caring on the inside. i cant wait to see how she develops through-out the rest of the story. onto the next chapter! XD
-steph135

ohhh this is a shortie chapter! thats okay though, it was awesome! i feel bad for her about her pareants though! she kinda couldnt help freaking out alittle bit, but poor little dastan doesnt know what shes talking about :( awww lol and they shared pizza! so cute. im glad their slowly becoming more friendly towards each other.
-steph135

hey, nice job on this one. i really like the back and forth dialogue of mickey and dastan. the thing about the missing kid stuff is interesting...im liking that this story is a bit of a mystery :P onto the next chapter!
-steph135

haha i like their little back-and-forth conversations! i love how they're both alittle sarcastic :P
i have one word of advice for you though. i know that in the last chapter, you showed how shocked mickey was about seing the fairy godmother, but i think she should talk alittle more about how she feels. i dont know, but maybe just alittle more on how unreal it is and how she didnt think it could happen in real life, you know? other then that though, it was awesome! onto chapter 7 XD
-steph235

hmmm things just got very interesting :P this is a cool twist. i like it, and im excited to meet Dastan. on to the next chapter! oh and by the way, happy halloween! XD
-steph135

hey! again, i think i would love that ride. the one about the family in the 1900s? i dont know, i just love history!
wow that part at the end though with the weird ride with the girl only mickey seems to have seen. did i mention i love mystery to? and action and romance and suspence. all that awesome stuff lol :P oh, and that part and the end was a great cliff hanger. i'll read more tomorow!
-steph135

aww poor brother! oh well, he needs to toughen up anyway, so it was good for him :) i really like mikey's personality, its not like shes a little angel but shes not bad eaither, which as confusing as it sounds, makes her perfect! i love her thoughts as well. they flow perfectly from subject to subject :P well, on to chapter four!
-steph135