|Reviews for The Onyx Tattoo|
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 6
Whoa, talk about weird. Polen against his brother? Uh oh!
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 5
Cool, he found the Solitaire! I can't wait to see what's next.
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 4
Poor Polen! Looks like his life sucks now... onto the next chapter!
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 3
Awesome! Onto the next chapter!
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 2
Saw some mistakes here and there but this is really cool!
| Kayla 2/13/13 . chapter 1
Wow, cool, looking forward to reading more
| SapphireDragonHeart 12/19/12 . chapter 4
Boom, knew it.
| SapphireDragonHeart 12/18/12 . chapter 3
Okay, I can just tell Polen will get an Onyx tattoo
| SapphireDragonHeart 12/18/12 . chapter 1
Great plot! Just as good as your other stories. P.S., I'm Tisuro!
| Felrain 11/29/12 . chapter 6
Very interesting so far, I really like the characters attitudes!
| katayoku.no.tori 11/28/12 . chapter 6
wait, I thought Meyora was a servant of cobalt and the other girl was a servant of Topaz? Because the other girl had yellow eyes, while Meyora had blue eyes. I'm not sure though...
I lived this chapter too! ... I love all of your chapters! :D
Granger was really happy! it made me happy reading about him being happy. XD strange how things work like that.
Please post more! Please, please, please!? This story is amazing!
| katayoku.no.tori 11/28/12 . chapter 5
your best chapter yet! :D
you don't know how many times I aww'ed. this chapter was sad at times.
Cavieh's response was cruel! Polen didn't deserve that, he didn't mean to become a servant of Onyx. :(
So now he's leaving his family and joining the Solitaire... I hope you still bring them into the story every now and then! Even though Cavieh was a little harsh, he is still my favorite character, somehow XD
I loved the mystery in the beginning of the chapter, and what Polen thought about rocks, how he can digest them. that was awesome!
Going to read the next chapter now!
| katayoku.no.tori 11/25/12 . chapter 4
haha, my favorite part! XD
"When he walked to the kitchen, he was surprised to find Telcee already there, armed with a comb and a shallow bowl of water.
"I'm going to tame your hair today," Telcee said in all seriousness."
I loved this chapter more than the other ones! I can see why you enjoyed writing it. Being a servant seems scary, but not being one seems even scarier. I don't know which one I would prefer! DX
| katayoku.no.tori 11/25/12 . chapter 3
haha, I love your author's notes! :D
ooh, the rebel group sounds interesting. Can't wait to learn more!
Cavieh is my favorite character so far XD I'm exactly sure why, but he is!
I found another thing that might need fixing, but I'm not sure...
"And they fought against the Servants and their gods and goddesses, who for the most part were named after gemstones." - I think you should put '-their gods and goddesses who, for the most part, were named after gemstones', but I'm not exactly sure. does that sound right to you?
I'm going to read the next chapter soon!
| katayoku.no.tori 11/25/12 . chapter 2
Wow! I love this so much! This is amazing! The idea is really good, and the first chapter hooked me into reading this one. Haha, sorry for not reviewing the first chapter.
The name Cavieh is pretty sounding (if I'm even pronouncing it right XD). Cah-vay-ah? I'm not sure...
But anyways, I'm definitely continuing with this! It deserves more.
Um, there were a few things that I found that could be fixed.
"With a groan and a muttered curse he swung my legs over his narrow bunk and stretched." - I think you mean his legs, not my legs. :D
"His brown pupils were tinged with red," - I don't think pupil is the right word. Isn't that the black part of your eye? And the colored part the iris? I'm not sure.
Other than that this was great!