love this story the characters the deatail the stroy line and the title of the story!

man if i was a publisher this would have been on the shelfs a long time ago.

and i have a litle bit of luck here since someone is so amazing can you reveiw my story and possibly give some feed back for improvement or good thing in the story :)

Mate but this story has nothing wrong with and you shall cary on!

Why hello, Terff! It is I, A Story In The End.

Anyway, excellent first chapter. I really enjoyed it. There were one or two slight grammatical errors, but overall, it was epic.

I am looking forward to the next chapters.

(Oh, and if you are interested, I have a story on FanFiction. It's called The Secrets Of The Sands.)