I like the third person better, actually. It works better with your voice, you handle it better with more narrative distance. Good concept. I like it.

-REB

That was sad at first, and the ending was tragic and I liked the message at the end. I noticed some spelling mistakes in line 1, '...began pouring down as if the angles themselves...' did you mean Angels? Also one line 5, '...with his one though, Why...' did you mean his one thought? Nice story, though, keep it up.