|Reviews for Electus|
| Guest 6/28/12 . chapter 1
First, I'd like to tell you that your writing is not bad at all and I like your ideas. Second, I'd like to tell you that its not good for a young writer such as yourself, to put yourself down. You are a lot cooler than you give yourself credit for.
| Any59.0 6/18/12 . chapter 3
Ah, I think it would be best if you pushed the tab button every time you write dialog. Love the story!
| Ninjas are Everywhere 4/30/12 . chapter 3
Very fast paced, but overall, a good story. Continue writing- practice makes perfect!
| Abbytjie 4/29/12 . chapter 3
I really like this story but there are a lot of spelling and grammar errors, the type that a computer doesn't pick up. You should think about getting a beta. Also, when a character speaks you should start it on a new line. Other than that your story was really good.
| Any59.0 4/16/12 . chapter 2
Okay, I'm getting a little confused with who's a boy and who's a girl. It's a little unclear.
| John 4/14/12 . chapter 1
There is potential for great stories, but they are introduced too quickly try to dedicate the first chapter to introducing the characters. Also less characters would be easier to understand.