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Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 11Daw. Eiryu just wants a friend. Or a boyfriend maybe. Heh heh heh. Don't tell me I've misinterpreted that too, I tend to attach random sexual connotations to random unrelated things. Like dragons, and linoleum. I suck. Yay, conflict... |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 10So, dragons have a sexual connotation? OoooOooo. Did they, like, have sex during some past incarnation or something? OH! In a threesome, with the guy with the dragon tattoo. I bet that's it. (I'm kidding. Okay?) I had something [more important and non-sexual] to say. Then I forgot it. Lessee... Oh, right, movie. I find it amusing how confused Eiryu is by the whole movie watching and social interaction ideas. Haha. -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 9You appear to be replying to reviews as I'm reviewing. LOL. That is amusing. Funny conversation with friend. |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 8Love the modern-day wizard's lab, and I thought it was hilarious when Eiryu told him he was cursed. Still want more development of relationship and conflict. I'm hard to please, I know. -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 7Don't worry, it's a very natural-sounding infodump. He had chains picked out especially for him? That's... totally serial killer. Rey's hilarious. "I'm not done asking questions. Who said I was done asking questions?" I want more development of their relationship. And fluff. I like fluff. |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 6Interesting. And Rey's reacting more realistically now, even if the family isn't. I still think the story would be better off without the family. Love how Eiryu doesn't comprehend life. Hahaha. And I like how Rey wants to direct movies, it's a nice little detail. -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 5Need bigger conflict soon. You didn't need it this chapter, but you'll need it soon, otherwise the readers will get tired of this. I like that Rey gets sick when he's away from Eiryu. Thought the whole grandfather thing was a bit odd-is this incest now? Maybe not, but it still feels a bit strange. Still missing the panic factor- although I forave you for it, I thought I'd point it out anyway. I wonder if this story would work better if the parents weren't involved, like they died somehow, or if he was older? -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 4LOL. His mom thought he got a tattoo. Priceless. I forgive you for the lack of reasonable panic thingy. Maybe. |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 3Yeah, see, if I were his mom I'd more likely be asking, "WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU MEAN, FAMILIAR? WHO THE FUCK ARE YOU? DID YOU RAPE MY SON LAST NIGHT? Wait... did HE rape YOU?" Apparent lack of reasonable panic aside, I like this. It's kinda funnier than I expected. -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 2I love Rey, I think. Characterization might be a little off here, IDK though. It seems to me that if Rey was freezing up at the sight of somebody bleeding on the sidewalk last chapter, he'd have a stronger reaction to waking up chained to a wall. And to the magic, of course. Not sure though. Will read more. -REB |
Rogue Energizer Bunny 5/7/12 . chapter 1This totally just made my day. It's so accurate to human behavior. People assume that they'd be all "OMG!" and rescue some poor injured guy, but they're much more likely to stand there awkwardly and wonder what to do. LOL. I love how he knocked himself out, I mean, who does that? Very strong first chapter. You've set the bar high, now I have absolutely soaring expectations for the next ones. Cheers. -REB |
CalliScribbles 5/7/12 . chapter 12Yes, Rey, the goldfish was totally watching you. That's why you couldn't get any sleep. ;) |
CalliScribbles 5/6/12 . chapter 11It was somewhat disturbing. (Girl with the Dragon Tattoo.) Well written, but disturbing. Eiryu makes me want to head-keyboard sometimes. Seriously, I think he was raised by wolves or something. No, that's not my official guess. |
Reviews to Master 5/4/12 . chapter 11Since when do teachers not think about themselves? I know my teachers don't! I liked this chapter! Issac in a good friend! For a second there I was biting nail when Eiryu oh so gracefully told him out of the blue. Can't wait for the next one! |
Reviews to Master 5/3/12 . chapter 10I LOVE that movie. It was pretty intense though! Plus you putting it in with the story was genius if I do say so myself! :) I wanna know more about Eiyru's past! So do...something with this story! Until then imma gonna go and read some of your other stories! |