|Reviews for Two Halves|
| Linq 5/9/13 . chapter 22
That wasn't a bad ending!
And it's really great that you've basically become a new person since the beginning of the story, and Nathan now gets a chance to turn over a new leaf!
| DawnSister 5/4/13 . chapter 22
A happy ending, if a rushed one. I'm glad it ended there though, since it would have been difficult to write further past this point without more angst. I'm sure Dylan went out and told everyone that Nathan cheated on him, and I'm sure that Nathan lost all his so called friends at school, but I am equally sure that Shane helped him find new, more genuine ones and not ones that he thought he should be friends with just to have someone to call a friend.
Anyway, I enjoyed this story and will be reading it again to get it all in one go so to speak. I try to do this when a story has taken a long time to finish because sometimes it feels a bit segmented and broken. Reading it again sometimes gives me a different perspective and definitely gives the story a better flow, not that it didn't flow in the first place, because it did, in a lovely way.
Thank you for sharing this with us,
| DawnSister 5/4/13 . chapter 21
So glad you updated. This story seems to be taking off now and it was just when you seemed to be slowing down. Isn't that always the case when a story gets exciting? the reader gets all fired up but the writer gets a block the size of the Great Wall of China and it's just so frustrating for everyone.
Nathan seems to be growing some balls, but then Dylan stamped them right out again. Dylan needs a good long stern talking to, although, someone like him would never be able to see that some of the blame lies with him. I'm saying some, because Nathan should have realised a long time ago that Dylan was a controlling asshole, but people in these sort of relationships don't realise, and when they do it's sometimes too late to get out and they have been so undermined they don't feel strong enough to do anything about it. I understand Nathan's helplessness.
I also understand Shane's perfectness too. Since he is seen from Nathan's point of view he is the exact opposite of Dylan. There will be reality checks I'm sure once Shane and Nathan are officially together. No one is that perfect, but then who is ever happy with perfect?
Looking forward to the next chapter...Oh look it's there...you're on fire again :D
| JHeartbreak 5/4/13 . chapter 22
This was a nice ending. It's pretty clear that your heart was out of it - not that you seemed to hate it, but you can tell when something ends with a bang compared to a limp. But sometimes as writers we just have to do stuff like that.
You say you aren't sure there are people like Shane in the world, and I think that's true. I was going to say - it isn't Shane's responsibility to love Nathan unconditionally. All of our adult relationships are founded on conditional love - the condition being a healthy respect and stuff like that. I don't think it's a flaw in the story, or anything, but I'm just thinking about that here. It's part of how Shane is more of a mother to Nathan than a lover. Because that's a relationship that depends on unconditional love.
Thanks so much for giving me that big shoutout in the end notes. I've greatly enjoyed reading this story and your other stories. Don't stop writing; you've got a talent, and you keep improving your skills too, so I know you will go places.
| Skyless-11 5/4/13 . chapter 22
awhhh it's done :( makes me sad and at the same time glad xD now I don't have to wonder till the end of time if Dylan and Nate break up hahaha :))
Anyway. I told you something about the realism of this story a while ago and I intend to keep to it. But not completely. You see, your Dylan - Nate story is perfectly real and would be even without the anxiety stuff. That's how most relationships are really: Nate was searching for emotional support and Dylan want a physical relationship, and neither of them wanted to cave for the other and give them what they want. Whereas, sure, Dylan was in the wrong, as he shouldn't have pushed so much, Nate was too much of a teaser, to say it like this. I understand he wasn't ready for a physical relationship, but you don't start a random relationship just hoping for it to remain emotional - that's what cats and friends are for. lovers too, but when you go in a relationship you have to be ready to give way to the other's desires and needs too, not just yours selfishly. Both Dylan and Nate were selfish from this point of view, though, yes I understand that nate wasn't like that because he wanted to, but because of his psychological problems. But a relationship like this wouldn't have been prone to success ever. And really, excluding the anxiety disorder factor, most teenager relationships are like this... Which is why this part of the story was perfectly realistic.
On the other hand, why do we need books and fiction if it would reiterate reality without any touch of imagination. It can be worse (think about Dickens kind of worse) or it can be better thanks to imagination. In this story, Shane is the touch of "fantasy". As you said, he's way too perfect. He's like... selfless - but in a good way. Self-giving? You created him as a perfect support for Nate. Like, PERFECT perfect. It's kind of like he was created with the only purpose of being "half" of Nate. And Nate is real. So his counterpart is not real. Because there's no such thing as the "perfect half" xD But i still love shane because, again, if this perfection wouldn't be included in literature and art in general, why would we still read it, right? So good going there :D
Hope you understood what I meant haha :)) well
Good going, and to more slashes :
| Chaos Fortuna 4/30/13 . chapter 21
Amazing chapter! I absolutely adored this and the last one. I got worried that you abandoned this, and I'm glad you didn't. I love you realistic you make the characters. Yes Shane is a little too perfect, but there are some people very much like that. I'm personally glad Nate and Dylan are no longer together, but I think there will be a lot more interaction between them. I'm excited for the next chapter, I just hope it doesn't take quite as long for it.
Personally I don't think the flow was rushed at all. It fit perfectly in with what you have already written. I know personally how fast those decisions can come about. Keep it up and don't let the idiots who can't understand anxiety or that this is fiction get you down. You're doing a great job with this story.
| Guest 4/29/13 . chapter 6
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| BloodyJam 4/29/13 . chapter 21
Oh I love this story! I really love how you have the voice inside Nathan's head dragging him down all the time, and that he talks to it etc, I think it's really smart!
I suffer from social anxiety and while it may not be as bad as Nathan's I like how easy he is to relate to, if that makes sense :)
I can't wait for a new chapter!
| A.Collins 4/6/13 . chapter 20
I'm in love with him. I'm wearing his underwear.
I absolutely love those lines, lmao. Especially since, in my head, I read the first one as if Nate was in awe of his love, and the second one was deadpanned. Heh.
It's sad that this story is on hiatus, especially since I started to grow fond for it (even Nate, to my surprise). But you, as a person, are more important than a story. So taking as much time off for your sanity is totally and completely understandable and no humane reader could fault you for it. We'll be here to greet you with smiles and stuff when you do decide to finish this story. Do you!
| A.Collins 4/6/13 . chapter 19
I don't think what Nate is feeling is love. He's quite the dramatic person, and I feel that he got caught up in the moment of having someone hold him and pay attention to him and care for him when his friends and boyfriend failed at that. I think what he feels for Shane could possibly turn into love, but not at this moment.
But I guess, considering how late I'm reviewing, ill just see what happens next in the following chapters.
| shrug 3/31/13 . chapter 11
Nathan is kind of a little bitch, isn't he. I'm starting to think SHANE is too good for him. Nathan goes around trying to justify everything, trying to make everyone pity him, and they should. But not in a "oh poor guy, he's had a rough life", in a "this guy is kind of pathetic" kind of way. I agree with most of what the voice in his head says. If this kid has anxiety, he needs to go to a therapist and get treated for it. Geez.
| Lurker whatevs 3/14/13 . chapter 21
Honestly, you can end the story where it is. That being said, I loved this story. So, don't get too upset over what I say next, okay?
The problem isn't with Shane being "too perfect". The problem is that this seems like all of Nathan's problems will disappear because someone finally gives a s**t about him. The thing is, with mental illnesses (and, yes, he has them), wanting to get better is only a first step. Getting out of the "abusive" relationship (because Dylan is abusive by his neglect of his partner's needs, if not directly physically, sexually, or verbally) is, again, a START. One thing Nathan almost certainly needs are anxiety meds, as there are real chemical imbalances in the brain that can cause these problems that are so easy to dismiss as being "all in your head". Sorry, that's a soapbox of mine. Point being, Shane doesn't need to change, but Nathan does need to get dragged to see a good headshrinker.
Now, on the other hand, I will note that most of Nathan's experiences really strike a chord with me. I have some similar problems, though I never crossed over into being a cutter. If you don't have similar problems, then I stand in awe, because he is so very, VERY believable.
Oh, and... yeah, btw, good job with this story!
| supercurlycat3 3/13/13 . chapter 21
I can't wait for the next chapter! You take all the time you need to work on it I can wait x3
| Linq 2/16/13 . chapter 21
NO. THIS IS UNACCEPTABLE!
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| LittleMonster13 2/16/13 . chapter 21
I LOVE YOU AND I AM CRYING.
Don't worry, I'll be okay.
OMFG PLEASE LET'S TALK ABOUT GAGA I AM SO SAD AND WORRIED AND UPSET.