|Reviews for Two Halves|
| Aletiah 7/14/12 . chapter 12
Great chapter, even the sad ending. But as I have said, I love angsty stories, so this fits me perfect! (Though I love good endings too, just so you know ;) ) Keep it up!
| LittleMonster13 7/13/12 . chapter 12
Oh no Nathan... I hate it when he cuts. If he could just see how adorable and sweet he is! If he could only see himself the way Shane sees him!
That voice in his head needs to be bitch slapped.
Anyways, I love how he tries so hard to be a faithful boyfriend. It's a great quality to have! But he beats himself up too much. Gr. I really like Dylan! He's a sweetheart. But he and Nathan will never work out.
And I always read your replies to reviewers at the bottom, and don't be paranoid about your characters. They are all very unique! Especially Ryan and James... I just love them. Did you know Unexpected was the very first story I read on here and followed til the end? I still miss looking for updates every day. My mom even knows the whole story because I STILL talk about it! :D
Thank you for the update! It was wondeful as always!
| CharlieTehUnicron 7/13/12 . chapter 12
I'm just worried about the transition from Dylan to Shane and how it's gonna happen. Dylan seems like a nice guy, I don't want to see him get hurt :(
| Skyless-11 7/13/12 . chapter 12
Haa! Nice chapter! well... not... like that I mean... I'm not much of a sadist... of coure I feel bad for Nathan and all that and I'm sorry it developed like that... but I can't but like this chapter xD Probably because I'm grateful we finally got it xD
Yes, I know that it takes a certain type of person to like Nathan. I ... don't hate him, but I just can't come to like him... I understand that his mind screws him up... and I really sympathise with him because of that. I can understand what it means to have a mind to antagonize you at your every move, hit you when you do wrong or good, making you question your motives... But for some reason.. at least in this chapter... I can't but wonder if his mind isn't by any chance right...
On another note. Little of Shane today :( that saddens me, I really like him. But this kind of makes me suppose it means something will happen between them the next chapter. For some reason I can't imagine Dylan as being a main character, so his presence all through one chapter doesn't feel all too right.
Can't wait to see the next chapter.
Between. Why do you not feel motivated? It's a beautiful story and how it is now you have like n ways to go about it now :D though... yeah... that might be exactly what's making you lack motivation... I can understand that :D I suggest this: fill a hot-tub with water(however you like it. hot, warm, cold), and lay in there for a few tens of minutes(if not a few hours). And don't do anything but imagine Shane and Nate :D Take a glass of something cold with you : You'll have some nice inspiration :D
Or. IF you just lack drive to write, but not inspiration - spend time on fictionpress, read, read and read till you finally have that tingle in your fingers again :D it took me about a week xD probably less for you :D
| TheMusicIsEnough 7/12/12 . chapter 12
Nooo! Don't cut yourself Nathan! :( I don't really know what to say about this chapter. Poor Nathan. He should really tell Dylan the truth, if Nathan loves him even half as much as he's trying to convince himself, then he should realise that Dylan deserves to know the truth no matter what the consequences are. I really think it'll help him feel better about the situation too.
The story is getting more and more interesting! I love all the drama, I'm practically on the edge of my seat, begging for more :)
| Skyless-11 7/7/12 . chapter 11
Okay, so... I saw you saw the reviews on the other novels, but this one is actually the first one I read (on this site actually), but for some reason I didn't review. I will now, because the waiting for the next chapter is KILLING me QQ
I really enjoy this story. I love Shane mostly! He's... I don't know... lovable? I don't like how Nathan is treating him. Apart from the "I have a boyfriend and you're hitting on me" thing, he didn't do anything wrong! Yes, that might be a nasty thing to do, but not bad enough to be treated like shit... seriously now.
I don't like Nathan. And not that I don't like how you wrote him, or how he fits in the story (because, like always, you do that amazingly), but for who and how he is. I just can't empathise with him. First off for how he's treating Shane, secondly for how he keeps avoiding that something is not working his relationship, thirdly for his wimpy mad. I may be a lot like him, but I don't agree with losing yourself to your fears, to your imagination... I agree that it's not easy, but if you're not strong enough to do it, then you're weak, therefore wimpy. You made him exceptionally well, but he's not very likeable for a main character...
On another note... God, you're AMAZING! (God is too, but I meant you). ALL your character's are different. SO different. Nathan/Willson/Ryan, Shane/Taylor/James: although they each fit into the general characterisation of ummm xD how to say it... I'll use the japanese names: uke/seme. All three of your uke-s are feminine, yet not on the same level! Nathan is the girliest, while you can't exactly say that Willson is girly, though feminine, and Ryan is just... Ryan. The semes are so different too! from completely obnoxious to the most caring, from fearful to confident, from jocks to intellectuals. They're all SO different... only you could do it!
That's why probably I can't like Nathan so much... I liked and empathised with Wilson and Ryan a lot more. Both were strong, yet sensitive. They had their own issues, but not quite as Nathan. I just can't bring myself to like him.
Though I have a feeling you'll prove me wrong by the end, like you seem to always do xD
now, quick note: I may not like his personality, but I like him as a character, how you made him, his place in the story, and I really love the story. Not liking him just makes me want to read more, to see how he changes.
Writer's Block you say? Hope I helped you get some confidence back. 3 you and appreciate you!
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 11
Aw, this was the last I can read today. I really like this story. I wonder what will happen between Nathan and Dylan, and between Nathan and Shane.
And Nathan's anxiety-problems. Will it get worse? Will he start cutting himself more or was that a one time thing? Update soon!
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 10
I guess Nathan will soon have to pick - Dylan or Shane.
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 9
Shane... I don't know what I should think about him. He knows Nathan has a boyfriend, so why did he do it? And Nathan... how will he handle this?
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 8
Poor Nathan, having a panic attack in class...
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 7
Ow, he tried to cut himself! Part of me wants to tell him nooo, don't do it, but another part of me loves angsty stories so that part says do it!
I love how you made it realistic, that he couldn't really do it, just shallow the first time.
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 6
Aw, poor Nathan. I hope it's just his internal thoughts and he's being wrong. But unfortunately it seems like he's close to the truth... it's not very nice to treat someone like the girls treated him.
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 5
I knew he was gay! But now I don't think they moved because of that, he seemed so relaxed about it.
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 4
Shane seems interesting. I wonder why they moved. I have my guesses though, since this is a slash ;)
| Aletiah 7/7/12 . chapter 3
Poor Nathan, but he is a bit unfair to Dylan, even if I know he doesn't mean it. Sometimes I think it can be hard for a person who never has felt mentally ill to understand what it's like. But he could try a little bit more, maybe he just doesn't see how bad it is. Dylan I mean.
Nathan really has problems :(