|Reviews for Secret Bound|
| A. Gray 4/26/12 . chapter 1
Well I have to say that this was almost not hooking in the brokenness off the Prolog. It didn't seem to flow well, and some of the phrasing left me confused.
For instance: 'Yet, even though they don't believe we exist- we do.' this right after talk of higher power(s) made me think ok so this is POV of a god or the like.
The way you brok it up into chapters that were so short, and almost like little flash fiction strung together was also off putting.
The mass of grammer error made this har to read as well : '
1602, salemn, ma- During the time of the salemn witch trials'
Salem, MA- during the time is better, and a lot less confusing.
I think you have an intresting concept here, but it does need refinement.
| Drew1331 4/24/12 . chapter 1
Love the story!
I had never thought about the government using websites to capture werewolves and vampires, but really good idea and fresh and new!