Teehee, had me giggling at the old geezers bit. Please write more! Great start!

I don't even know why this made me laugh so much, but some bits really did! This is really good, and I can't wait to find out what happens next, hurry and update soon! :D

POST ANOTHER CHAPTER,NOW!...*cough* I mean please update soon.

Dawn is an amazing sounding person, not normally being pulled in by good looks I mean how does she do it, me I love them. I mean I love to stare at them, but it gets boring after you figure out that said guy is a jerk. :D

I love Japan, though I've never been, I love the culture, so I guess I'm not too shallow, because I know it's not all candy and roses. That leads me to ask have you ever been to Japan? Since you are basing the story in Japan. Or do you just like it?

If not either of those then did you just choose somewhere at random?

Anywho,please update soon, if you do I promise I'll be good. Haha maybe. XD I can't wait to read the next chapter the story seems like it's going to be good, since I do like when people write about bands etc. Hope you have a nice day.

really cool, blackbird! ;) i liked the descriptions, and the characters (dawn sounds exactly like you, haha) and it sounds like an excellent plot beginning :) good luck with writing it! is the gorgeous guy from overseas? cos of the blue eyes i mean :) or maybe it's just contacts, sneaky guy :L anyway yes good start to a story i'd say! if i had to criticise anything i would say that you occasionally dip in and out of present and past tense, but this can easily be fixed, and i always get confused with the two anyway :L sooo, update soon! :) :)

ostrich :) xxx