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Rae Kitano 5/17/12 . chapter 3I really enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing it :) |
WayRoundWrong 5/10/12 . chapter 3 Overall a satisfyingly complete short story to read. The descriptive paragraphs were well done. They were clear, with lots of nice little details, that made it easy to imagine. Altogether they added a vibrancy to the story. My particular favourite areas being the descriptions of the car boot sale and the slow thawing of their awkward relationship (which I think was paced about right). |
marginal-utility 5/6/12 . chapter 3good chapter |
lovesyoumore 5/4/12 . chapter 1love this, you're a great writer! |
JHeartbreak 5/4/12 . chapter 3I would like to inform you that canoe riding is a perfectly respectable date activity. www dot harkavagrant dot com/index dot php?id250 I like this chapter best. The characters have really reached full flower in terms of complexity and authenticity. I think there is a way to bring this across from the very beginning of the story. The first chapter makes them appear flat and stilted (compared to this chapter). It's not just a question of not knowing them very well yet, but of finding ways for the reader to see the complexity, even if the characters can't. So, in each chapter my estimation of your abilities has proabably doubled. I think you've really got it. I think, overall, you can find a way to streamline your stories. There seems to be a lot of interior monologue here that doesn't really go anywhere. It deadens the impact of the events. If you can find a way to either cut it down to a minimum or make the interior monologue as interesting as the events themselves you will strengthen your work a lot. That's what I'm thinking. I hope you write something again soon. |
peacelovejay 5/4/12 . chapter 1(This is a review for the whole story): Love it! So cute, and there is a big "aha" moment when James explains himself at the end. |
Kyla 5/4/12 . chapter 3 Really nice story! Loved it! I wish there were more chapters! ;) |
Sakia Rumei 5/3/12 . chapter 3Ah,the final chapter. I love this chapter because i'm glad the date went very well and the fact that they managed to resolve their misunderstanding of each other. You're a good writer, i love reading every word of this fic and i couldn't help but smile at the ending. I read your profile notes and i wish you luck in the future. I would love to see the next fiction you'll come up with. Thank you for uploading this and wish you good luck (again) in life and writing. Till next time. |
FallenWindRider 5/3/12 . chapter 3That was wonderful! The characters, the plot, the misunderstanding. Everything about this story was very catching. My heart melted in this chapter, it was a very nice, light read. Thank you! |
Liquid Under Mirrors 5/3/12 . chapter 3Wonderful. You portrayed them wonderfully and you didn't even have more than two characters ... well anyways, I'm glad they finally got to understand each other. |
Sakia Rumei 5/3/12 . chapter 2I'm glad to find a slash fic with such an unique plot, i mean who interviews someone to be their boyfriend? it would be kind of interesting if it were to happen in real life though... What i find fascinating is James's character. You described him very well and i can't help but be intrigued by his..arrogance? somehow i feel that he's putting up a facade when he's with his friends. I also love how the relationship between Sam and James will develop, somehow i can envision to be a cute couple. Then again,"cute" might not be the best adjective... Anyway, keep up the good work. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. Good luck in writing and real life. Till next time. |
JHeartbreak 5/1/12 . chapter 2"I almost wished the events had been written down somewhere..." Yes, if only someone would be so kind as to type them up and, say, post them on the internet. I enjoy the power-politics in this chapter. The story is much improved, somehow, over this chapter. Probably with filling in the characters. They feel more authentic. |
Liquid Under Mirrors 4/30/12 . chapter 2Your writing was satisfying descriptive and blunt and your characters seemed very realistic. Good work, and I'm looking forward ot the next chapter. |
marginal-utility 4/30/12 . chapter 2seems to me James has Asperger's Syndrome. but then how can he so easily be social with his friends? confusing. |
bookppl93 4/30/12 . chapter 2Thanks for updating ; D |