|Reviews for Halfblood Chronicles|
| Chiisutofupuru 11/12/12 . chapter 3
Yep, it's a little choppy during the fight but that's an easy fix I think. I also found it a little weird how before the fight Amara kept her distance from Dareth and then after they were 'playful' and almost seemed to 'like' each other.
Otherwise, I liked Amara so far. Sad there was no other description other than being an average fifteen-year-old and half damien.
Keep Going! like a 'hyper drunk monkey'! (That was an awesome description)
| Snowsheba 5/10/12 . chapter 2
Let's see... there is the part where you didn't put a new paragraph when someone else started talking. And there was also the misspelling of 'coming'.
In all, it still feels a bit rushed and choppy. But... nicely done. The characters are quite attractive, I think.
| Bluesparks 5/10/12 . chapter 2
Heh, I just edited it somewhat, and added more to the first chapter. Sorry, there may be some typos. If you see some, than please tell me :) Thanks!
| g r a m m a r g u r l 4/27/12 . chapter 1
Hooking beginning! It is a bit choppy and sudden, but with a little rewording and editing that can easily be fixed. Sounds like a good plot so far! :) keep up the awesomeness!
p.s. I will tryyy to be your unofficial beta - but I'm so stinkin' busy :( I'll do what I can
| Snowsheba 4/27/12 . chapter 1
My interest is piqued.
You didn't make a new paragraph for when the next person was speaking, which is bothersome, and the words also seemed just a bit rushed, which is also bothersome.
BUT - I absolutely love your word choice. Beautiful adjectives, beautiful descriptions, just absolutely gorgeous. I am envious.
I look forward to the next update. Happy writing! Snowsheba