*collapse :x
and "a sign that she was having a was tempted to jump out bed the moment realization struck" that section needs slight editing, because it doesn't make sense
I figured it out, butyeah. Don't worry, I make mistakes like that too and I go back and am like "wtfdude"
But other than that, I really liked it :)
Keep truckin' on, yo

Very interesting. My mind is just like "whaaaaat?"
Also *adrenaline...just thought I would let you know :)
Otherwise, everything is super good and engaging :3

WOW...Jenz...this is sooo good, i really wanna read on!..ur so good at writing...no wonder you get A's on all your short stories in english!

:o

This is really interesting so far! I would love to see how it turns out :x

I read your other entry too, and it was really good. Short and to the point, but really good all the same :3