| Reviews for A story of Zombies in England |
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Zukafu Chirimoarimoto 7/8/12 . chapter 1This is a review. I suggest you write and put up the next chapter now Kthanksropey! |
Zenzak101 4/28/12 . chapter 1Interesting prologue. Funny how in a zombie apocalypse, usually half the group dies, if not all. I did kind of get a little annoyed at the block of text that described every body, so I would suggest that you try doing a separate paragraph for every character. I also saw a couple of periods missing. |
LessTalk-MoreWriting 4/28/12 . chapter 1This is pretty interesting since I've never read a zombie story like this before. And as for constructive criticism; I noticed that you had a couple of run-on sentences, especially at the beginning; the big block of words in the middle may discourage some people and is the main character's friend named Ruki or Riku, because you kind of swapped letters a couple times there. Those are the only things I saw, but I hope you continue this. I'm very interested. :D |