Hello fellow writer.

Hmm firstly, a little advice is that maybe you could give a clearer paragraphing to your story because right now it's quite cramped together so it might get tiring for the eyes.

As for the story, it was quite nice, i mean I am a lover of sci-fi stories so this kinda suits me. It was quite an enjoyable chapter but do note of the paragraphing. :)

Keep on writing and I will read your next chapter soon :)