Let us say we like this (or at least I, Z, did; we're writing a story together so we share this account). But it was really good. Vivid. Your a really good writer. Parts like, "It would soon be over anyway," gave me a chill as I realized what she was going to do. I think you over did it a little with the blood (it was good it was in there) but you could have described why she's doing this or something of the sort. I encourage reading a Stephen king novel like The Shining. Man, that's pretty scary. It gave me inspiration and showed me books can be scary. Review me and my friend T. Afton A's story. It's a comedy (I know, right?) but as for me I can do a little bit of both. Thank you for this story. My friend and my's story is titled A Scout is... found in the Humor section.

P.S. Some scholars believe the only difference between genres are the way the emotions are expressed. Thought that rather interseting.

Wow... this is fabulous, short yet vivid. The last sentence gave me goosebumps. Last two, rather.

By the way "ticked" should be "ticket" I believe.

Have a nice day :)