|Reviews for Son of the Underworld|
| The Bald Fiasco 8/24/12 . chapter 11
"What the hell was all that about?"
Leave it to you to give a perfectly fine and dandy chapter a nail-biting end! Honestly, what is up with Alex? You told me she isn't an oracle, so...Were-wolf? 0.o. Naaa...wouldn't suit the lore...Some "were-" creature from Greek Myth? Dammit woman! Tell us already! On second thought, don't. I like the suspense...:P
Is Logan based on Chipmunk? I mean, lanky, horrible in Math...and absolutely random crushes...yea...And seriously, introduce the neighbours. I REALLY want to meet them! Got a feeling that they can give quite a few laughs! I mean, Alert Mode? Awesome! And please, I'm begging here...Jenna nd Mr. Lloyd! I'll treat you to Bella Italia! or Cream and Fudge!
The Cody part was really needed. We needed to see another side to him rather than just the playboy. And I gotta say, I like this more serious side, with his mother and whatnot...The Scooby Doo mode was cute! _, and Triton is well, Triton. Beta ETOH douchey hoi kemne?! I mean, WHOA! Only Joffrey and Robert and Lysa Arryn are douchier! But atleast you gave him a tiny speck of intelligence in this chapter, with the mother retort...And bastard son? Really? Game of Thrones much!?
The Alex-David part was well written. Loved David and Alex's relationship, and his maturity. But one thing: doesn't David have a fun side? I mean, all we ever see is the caring mature little brother...No immaturity? He's becoming a bit boring frankly...But the dad is getting doucheier and doucheier by the mention. I mean, lay off of em will ya!? Good job making us hate him but!
Also, THANK YOU! THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH! For the first time since Avatar: The Last Airbender, I find Animals getting character development when they are just side characters! I didnt expect it, but I loved it all the same! I mean, i only found it in i think just Avatar and Mulan I think...Ceb's character is awesome btw. Playful, yet fiercely protective of his master - beautiful! Fell in love with the mutt! and that "I'll be watching you, punk."...BEST! _
The Alex Nathan part was nice, with you finally giving me a reason to not like Nathan. I mean the dude doesn't know Lord of the Rings. BLASPHEMER! But I dunno, the Nathan Alex relationship just seems to be going a little one sided to me. I mean, Nathan doesnt say ANYTHING! Just oije, he said some stuff in that chapter ages ago. Full stop. I dont remember him opening up any more than that one time. But damn is he a good listener.
The sleepover part was cute. All childish and what not. But please, TELL ME JENNA'S "WORK" WAS TO CALL UP LLOYD!? PLEASE!
And as I already said, What the Hell is up with this chick?!
Hope to read again soon!
| Elusive Lucidity 8/23/12 . chapter 11
Triton is such a loser that it's funny reading about him! XD Lol, i liked what Cody thinks in his mind abt Triton. Then again, i like reading about Cody.
And it's merry-go-round...LOL! :P
Anyways, I loved loved LOVED Ceb! What an adorably awesome dog! The last part where he looks at Nate giving a look that says 'i'll be watching you punk' thant reminded me of that meme you posted on my wall. oije the kutta going, 'what are u looking at, punk?' sth lyk that. :P
And whoa, what was Alex up to? is she like Rachel Dare? You know getting premonitions and stuff...oracle of delphi type? :O just wondering out loud. It used to happen to Luke's mother too, right? :/
Update soon, okay?
| Alaeryel 8/22/12 . chapter 11
ABSOLUTE PERFECTION here Lethal-I nearly died when you referred to elves and Lothlorien! I write Tolkien fanfic and I am working on a story with Haldir and my own characters! My HEART GOES OUT TO BOTH David and Alex-I hope they find a way to negate and crush their father's attitude-IT'S NOT FAIR FOR THE CHILDREN! I think Triton needs and ass whooping himself. AND I am STILL CURIOUS as to what Aphrodite saw-you have AGAIN OUTDONE YOURSELF! LOOOOOOOOOOOOVED IT!
| LeUndeadRabidChipmunk 8/22/12 . chapter 11
Well, i'ma start off by saying i love logan! He sucks at math too! XD You knew that was coming i guess huh?! XP And God, alex is so paranoid scared of jenna's neighbours! She thinks they peer outta their curtains to catch her around?! Wow, either she's loco or they're reeally not into their kid! She was so cat-like! Oh, and lol on the scooby doo mode! Mermen, eugh, but why would'nt he get it on with some mermaid some time?! I don see the problem :P 'not for strategy, never for advice' lol! Alex keeps bumping into nate don' she? And they get along real nice! She totally opens up to him huh? :P Liked how you tried bringin in david more, totally liked how you brought more of ceb in! A lovable dog called cerberus, gotta dig that! Wanna see more of jenna and mr lloyd! And logan too, i want more logan! Don' go awol on updating if you can help it! More, and soon is the demand, as always! Deliver P
| Elusive Lucidity 8/11/12 . chapter 10
Ahh...God! I think I'll never tire of writing that Cody's AWESOME! XD I LOVE that guy!
When he said 'bond. James bond', i started snorting like a lunatic! And alex's answer was just spot on! Lol!
So, Alex's planning on getting a ninja outfit? Hmm...I have to agree with the boys. You're putting a lot of u in this Alex girl.
Oh and, there's nothing called short term amnesia. Amnesia-in itself-is short term memory loss, but I'm guessing u wud say something like 'I meant an amnesia that's really short-lived' or something, because you just are a self-righteous person.
Anywhoo...keep more of Logan's goofiness and more of Cody's awesomeness coming!
And think about giving some answers...FAST! :)
| LeUndeadRabidChipmunk 8/11/12 . chapter 10
Quik, not quick enough! You know, the update :P You know that quiet force in your voice and behaviour thing, i thought it was insanely kickass when mario puzo said Don Vito and inheriting it from him, Michael had that thing going. Put that into the son of Hades, imagine him having a Hades-i type force thing, by Zeus's saggiest toga, that's awesome! 0_0 And i like minotaur! He's this lame 'just doin my job' kinda guy! But reaally, Mr Lloyd has weird tastes, getting into insanely drunk, crying women at bars! Also, Triton is gay. Really, just gay. And Alex, i've said it once, i'll say it again, is soo you! Too bad she couldn't refute Logan with the Nate thing! First time Logan came out on top at anything! XD Also, great job writing cause you're not delaying the story with really lame tactics like characters not realising obvious things. That is really annoying in stories, movies and everywhere else! Nate quickly thinks up of Aphrodite as a possible culprit for the hellhound thing, which is something any reader would assume as well! So hell yea, your doin a great job at this! Keep em coming, and fast!
| Alaeryel 8/10/12 . chapter 10
THIS WAS AMAZINGLY BRILLIANT AND FUNNY! LOVED THE pick up line-would never work with me either! I felt so bad for the hellhound when Nathan found him even though he was sweet with the creature-to be used for something like that! If Aphrodite cant control them who the hell sent the creature out after Alex? CURIOSITY IS ABOUNDING and will PATIENTLY AWAIT THE NEXT CHAPTER AND FOR THE ANSWERS-it actually keeps the story INTRIGUING AND PERFECT-YOU DID AN OUTSTANDING AND EXTRAORDINARY JOB WITH THIS CHAPTER Lethal-just LOVE IT!
| The Bald Fiasco 8/10/12 . chapter 10
FINALLY! A chapter in which nothing major happens! Phew! I can breathe now...
Yea, good job. You needed a chapter in which nothing happened. About time...I mean, at the rate you were going, your healthiest of readers would've been clutching their hearts and screaming for their Gods soon. :P
Well, not much to say about this chapter. It was pretty darn good. A breather, as i already said. The Minotaur was funny. The dude's so darn clueless, its actually funny! :)
Jenna's dilemma about Mr. Lloyd was kinda cute. And the neighbor's scene was pretty funny...as was the speculation that Nate is gay. Honestly, a gay Son of Hades? How in the world would that work out? But I can soooooooooooo imagine Triton being gay. I mean, one line, one line - thats all it took, and i'm like: DOUCHEBAG!
But honestly, what is Aphrodite up to? I figured that she'd go talk to Poseidon, but seriously, what? And does Triton know? I bet not. Dude's too gay.
But that pick up line! SERIOUSLY DUDE, THAT PICK UP LINE! GOLDEN MAN, GOLDEN! I swear, I'm gonna try that on Elusive! Just to see her reaction! I mean, how can a pick-up line be THAT lame! I mean, the odds of it working are freaking IMPOSSIBLE! No. Wait. Ten bucks says Rocky will fall for it!
Wait...So you're saying that "Only a powerful enough being residing or connected to the Underworld could pull that off."...Are you implying Kronos? or...Tartarus HIMSELF!? Cause that would be freaking AWESOME! I mean, Tartarus is like uber-badass, but seriously under-rated. But not as much as Pontus. No-one knows who Pontus is...
And seriously, Mr. Rickman? Alan Rickman? Ahhhhhhhhh...first Logan, and now Rickman. Why did I not see that coming? When are you gonna introduce a Fred? :P
| Damon Salvatore 8/5/12 . chapter 9
:D Continue to update, this is quite a good story. I do wonder what that Aphrodite girl is trying to do... hmm...
| Alaeryel 8/4/12 . chapter 9
OH YOU WERE SO RIGHT-LOVED that the chapter was longer BUT it still LEFT me WANTING MORE! IT ALWAYS DOES! My CURIOSITY is still KILLING ME-I GOTTA KNOW WHY and WHAT is going on! I also LOVED the scene between Hades and Aphrodite-another CURIOSITY! What an AMAZING and PERFECT JOB you are doing with writing this story-I just CANNOT get ENOUGH! As USUAL I will be WATCHING FOR MORE! KEEP UP THE TREMENDOUS JOB Lethal!
| The Bald Fiasco 8/4/12 . chapter 9
You planning to publish this thing? Cause MAN WAS THIS CHAPTER AWESOME!
Ok...starting from the begining...The first section was BRILLIANT! Loved how you kept the whole thing going and revealed Jenna at the very end. I was totally mesmerized. D And Mr. Lloyd (The Evan reference was a bit vague btw...i mean, you only mentioned it once very side-note marka bhabe) was really nice. Loved his gentlemanlyness with Jenna, and their general chemistry. Kinda cute really. I'd love to see more of them later...D
Also, what the hell is Aphroditie up to thats making Hades so pissed? What's she accusing Nate of? I mean, WHAT THE HELL IS SHE UP TO?! (also, imagined Aphroditie as Theron. GAGA! XD) But seriously, Hades has paaaaaaaaaaaaart. I mean, his cold awesomeness...shivers down my back i tell you, major shivers! The atmosphere in that conversation was reeeeeeeeeeeeally well made!
Ok. Kayla. Isn't she supposed to be the i-dont-bother-trying-but-still-end-up-seducing-guy s-anyway type of chick? This chapter, she comes off as a total slut. I dunno. Or paart gese. She doesnt come off as hot here, rather more of a despo slut...*shrugs* But it was kinda cute how Nathan kept having Alex pop into his vision throught that conversation...funny. )
Logan aar Alex-er part-ta joss chilo. I love how you built up their friendship and all. It's nice. Also, is Logan gonna get a chick? I like the guy...
But seriously man, what the hell is up with Alex? And Jenna? I'm gonna presume that it's the same thing, since you already told us that she told Jenna and Jenna alone, and that part where Alex was wondering why they were reacting differently to this thing. And until you tell us, I'm also gonna presume that Rainbow Monkey Commando's wanna abduct Alex and slow dance with her. That's the best theory I've got, so yea...
But seriously, the Hellhound's entry was EPIC! The atmosphere you created beforehand, and its slow snarling entry...WHOA! Loved the way you described it, pura Hound of the Baskervilles! God was it awesome! I barely read the Nathan part till he apparated behind Alex...had to read it again once i'd finished! Shivers down my spine man, serious shivers down my spine! *shudders*
And seriously man, Nathan-er alda paart! Shadow, Nathan, oooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooo. His methods are epic. Although i found the "soft push" to the ground part a little lame. Kinda reminds me of something Redwan told me about AZ Sir. Remember that guy? Gay English teacher from class 9 with the bright shirts? Yea. Him.
Ok. Back to your story. Lets see...Nathan, epic as always. Good job on the little "skirmish" kinda thing with the dog. Liked that. Cept for the soft push. But the fact that the Hellhounds aren't Nathans puppies anymore really have me thinking...WHAT is going on here? So many questions...so few clues! I hate you for this man. But seriously, all these cliffhangers are making the things quite entertaining. I mean, thanks to them, I was itching to get away from Bubu and Shareq Bhaiya (yea, they're staying over. MOVIE FEST!) to read your stuff. Although beshi dile your readers might forget a few of them...but you prolly still have a few more left to go till that happens...But seriously, WHAT IS UP WITH THE (UNDER)WORLD?
And seriously, Alex after the rescue was pretty darn funny. Her hystericalness...P And how Nathan covered it up. Their chemistry was pretty well made there too...especially the "Oddly enough there was nothing awkward about the silence. Neither of them felt the need to speak to make each others' presence comfortable." And how she knew that Nathan's horrendous place was Steve's Party. Nice. Loving them!
But seriously MYSTERIES! MUST SOLVE! Gonna go looking for my plush Scooby Doo now...maybe he can help...
Now to wait for my net to return...DAMMIT!
| Elusive Lucidity 8/4/12 . chapter 9
What is up with Jenna?
Why did the hellhound appear infront of Alex?
Why isn't Alex affected by what Jenna was going through?
Why did Alex leave her own place?
What's going on with Alex that she won't let David or Logan know?
Why is Kalya trying to seduce Nathan?
What the hell does Aphrodite want?
Why didn't the hellhound recognise Alex?
Who the hell was that Evan guy? Mr. Lloyd?! But didn't Jenna already talk to Mr. Lloyd in school when she went to pick Alex up from detention? So y didn't she recognize him?
Who is this new Evan guy you introduced?
...From all the above questions I raised, you have a fairly nice idea how many cliffs I'm hanging from now! So, y don't you do us all a favour and start spewing out some answers instead of creating more? PLEASE!
I am waiting for answers in the next chapter!
'We most probably live in the most boring neighborhood in the country,' Alex said. 'Nothing happens around here. Plus Jenna's place is pretty close. It'll be no problem.'
'Go home Logan,' Alex said. 'If something does happen you won't be able to save my ass even if you are with me.'
This made Logan roll his eyes at her. 'I'll take that as a major insult.'
Yea Logan not the brightest bulb in the Christmas tree r u? :P
| LeUndeadRabidChipmunk 8/4/12 . chapter 9
it's Evan Lloyd isn't it?! XD and know what, i read the entirity of Hades's speech with Nighy's voice in my head! the way he talks as Davy Jones, and Viktor! even those expressions of anger that Viktor has! i dunno who you imagine him to be, but Nighy is gonna be Hades for me! please don't think up of Zeus as Liam Neeson -_- i'd kill myself. anywho, Kayla is a total typical sorority slut, creepy more than seductive, them! and don' tell me the forces of the underworld are gonna be on lookout for Alex from now! what's with a frikkin hellhound? also-
'Going home,' Alex repeated. 'And I would have been home by now if that stupid dog hadn't come out of nowhere.'
..and i woulda gotten away with it too, if it weren't for those pesky kids! (scooby doo clears throat) and that dog! XD anywho, long chap, but i read it in a jiff. that should say sth good about it. don' let this go cold now, bring on the next! i await!
| Alaeryel 7/27/12 . chapter 8
Hey Lethal-sorry for the late review-I read this a couple days ago but sis kicked me out of her room before could review then the computer hasn't let me sign on for very long-stupid thing! I LOVED LOVED LOVED THIS chapter. You have me soooooo wound up with this story I FEEL LIKE I AM FALLING OFF A CLIFF! Still alot of questions I need (want) answered and the waiting is half the fun! I CANNOT WAIT FOR MORE OF THIS! YOU ARE AN AMAZING WRITER AND STORYTELLER-PURE PERFECTION!
| The Bald Fiasco 7/24/12 . chapter 8
MOTHER OF GODS WAS THIS AN AWESOME CHAPTER!
wish you elaborated on the spar though, but the cutting in was cool. but THE SWORDS MAN, THE SWORDS! Cody's one is like waterbending! and Nathan's! WHOA! A BLACK SMOKY LIGHTSABER WITH A BLADE! AND FUNKY GREEK INSCRPTIONS (google translate? 0.o)! GAGAGAGAGAGAGAGA! I THINK I'M IN LOVE! fuck that, i KNOW i'm in love! Listen, if all else fails in life, join a video game company or a movie studio and design swords for them. You have a future there!
must...move...on...from...swords...OK! Now, lets look at the rest of the chapter...lets see...the first part: the convo btwn Logan and Alex - yea, that part seemed a little...bland. I dunno...too much talk maybe?
The Cody-Alex chemistry was good though! They would be fun to watch bickering.
Cody as always, was pretty awesome. Nathan still better. Love their friendship, and their swords! 3 That was a good convo there. Especially the "Out of bounds" part. P
AND SERIOUSLY WOMAN! WHAT'S WITH YOU AND CLIFF HANGERS! I WANT THE NEXT CHAPTER NOW! AND I MEAN IT! APHRODITE AND HADES! MAMMA MIA! i hate you for this...-_-
and seriously, WHAT IS BUGGING ALEX? Did she like have a dream about her Dad turning into a demon and flambeing her (Flambe. i love that word. that's my new favourite word. Flam-be. Flaaaaaam-be! D ); only to wake up and find her dad turning into a demon in front of her very eyes? MAANE KI EISHOBER!
also, Alex...her character...she needs more depth by now. I mean, another side other than her family issues. And a teensie bit on Nate too, though i dont expect much considering how reserved the dude is... And Logan, if he's gonna play a major role. and Jenna. But seriously, Alex needs a new hobbie!
Also, the swords were epic. They overshadowed everything in this chapter cept the final sentence. Screw Clash of Kings. I'm dreaming of Shadow tonight! D