|Reviews for BladeArc|
| kingofe3 10/29/12 . chapter 1
Alright, I know this is going to be awesome from the first chapter! Can't wait to read more!
| Van Quatra 10/29/12 . chapter 21
oh so funny, i knew he'd get busted. funny as heck
| Benehime 10/29/12 . chapter 4
I like Ennis out of all of them, but I do also like this new character. Some funny parts here and there made me chuckle. I'm still waiting for Yuuto to show up everybody! I'm beginning to understand his character, but I want him to be more... mature? I'm starting to also like your play on how your trying to parody RPGs. It's starting to pick up, and I'm excited to see how Yuuto progresses and who else will join our party. :D Keep up the good work!
| TheBloodEdge 10/28/12 . chapter 20
"While this kind of situation might be interesting or downright funny in anime or in any kind of fictional works, it wasn't the same in real life."
Unfortunately for you, Yuuto, you are a protagonist of a fictional work, so it was downright funny.
"My face was stuffed between her bosoms. While it was quite suffocating, it's worth it."
If you die like that, you have died the most honorable death. EVER.
""Yuuto, for a chosen hero of High World, you have a poor thinking," Qwinn sighed."
"...and I tried my best to avert my eyes from those healthy fruits of hers."
You can't. THE FRUITS COMPEL YOU.
"Qwinn took out something between her cleavage (was it a hammerspace?). It was a short stick that grew longer to become a wand."
Okay, this chapter is just HIGHLY QUOTABLE.
Let's get to the real review.
YUUTO YOU IDIOT! WHY DO YOU HAVE TO TRY TO BE SO NICE? LOOK AT THE MESS YOU GOT INTO!
Just when I thought Claire wasn't going to ruin his day, she did. Geez, do these girls have a fused mind that compels them to ask Yuuto for a date ON THE VERY SAME DAY? Must be the power of the Harem Warriors.
Qwinn gives off [the Reaper]'s trolling vibes. For all I know, she's really [the Reaper] in disguise. What is she planning to do to her Yuuto? Is it what I think it is? LUCKY CLONE!
The narrating on this chapter got way too funny when Yuuto got cloned. It's so confusing, so stupid, it's awesome!
Now for the Harem Statistics.
Today, every girl sans Liara has asked Yuuto out on a date. AT THE SAME TIME! So to say, if his plan works, Yuuto's social links will RANKU UP! If he fails, which I know he is going to, well, it'll either mess up the harem, or just make em' love him more. I know for sure Claire will always stick with Yuuto (Domination Mark), so she's safe.
How is this going to fail you ask? Yuuto's clones share a mind. So because he has to multi-task, Yuuto will eventually mix up his girls and they'll get all jelly!
| The lone canine 10/28/12 . chapter 20
"Anything that could go wrong would always go wrong." I have never heard this before but it is so true, yes. This chapter is so full of Yuuto, and girls, and dates if you will. It was funny and a great chapter. Now I can't wait til' the next one, I am looking forward to it. Very nicely done.
| TheBloodEdge 10/28/12 . chapter 19
And a new addition to Yuuto's harem! Morgan seems battle hungry, and if flanderized, she'd be a blood knight. Kinda cool seeing how she and Ennis know each other, if it weren't for the rest of the harem, this would be a love triangle
The battle was pretty neat, but Yuuto didn't break out any of his special moves. Kind of a downer for me, really.
I think one of the kingdom is evil. I vote the one with the shota as the leader, he seems innocent enough to make me think he's not evil but really is secretly evil.
Camelot's out, Morgan's being attacked, so yeah. Unless she's about to know something she shouldn't, there's no reason to assault her.
Harem statistics time!
Today, a new addition has entered the fray, damaging Yuuto/Ennis quite a bit as she and Ennis knew each other.
Kamui is getting attention on this chapter, as we find out her tragic backstory. Wow, those ogre folk are JACKASSES! Curses, curses! I was rooting for Claire but now I'm stuck between her and Kamui! DAMMIT!
| The lone canine 10/26/12 . chapter 18
Ahh I really loved this chapter. I like how Yuuto is developing and I think the short scene with King Qarr. I like how many characters were introduced in this chapter and the moments with Liara were great. Especially towards the end. Very nicely done!
| TheBloodEdge 10/26/12 . chapter 18
WHAT'S THIS?! GUYS?! IN MY HIGH FEMALE RATIO BLADEARC?! IMPOSSIBRU! GET THEM OUT, THE MALE-FEMALE RATIO WILL BE BALANCED! THIS IS TERRIBLE! THIS IS A TRAGEDY! BLADEARC IS FOREVER RUINED NOOOOOOW!
Brushing that aside.
I was expecting someone to say "People die if they are killed." But I guess that's just a silly prediction.
It seems the dwarf king has something against Dark Knights. Maybe it has something to do with kingdom. I couldn't help but chuckle at the fact that the scene resembled real world politics.
As I predicted, Liara's having trouble with this. Not because of age an lack of experience, but because of history (Close enough). I wonder what she can do to earn her respect.
And now... Harem statistics!
Liara and Claire seems to get more focus on this chapter. Liara moreso. I just want to be normal. I just want to be special. She and Yuuto get along well despite the fact that they have varying dreams.
Miya's just... There. I don't even know what she's doing here anymore. I'll just make a silly prediction and say that every moment offscreen she has, she's fighting against the evil scientist, Dr. Moronshirt, while wearing a hat. She also has the epically theme song playing every time she foils his plans.
OONTZ! OONTZ! OONTZ! DEN! DEN! DUN! DUN! DUN! MIYAAAAA! MIYA THE METAL EEEEELF!
But really, I think she should get a little more development. She's been falling behind on the harem statistics.
| bayonetja 10/25/12 . chapter 18
Awesome story! Please take care of the grammer though...
| Benehime 10/25/12 . chapter 3
One thing that draws me in or out of a story is dialogue... I have to say, your's borderlines on awkward. Just some areas of speech don't seem to flow to well or sound weird-ish. One thing I don't like is how Yuuto is just going along with all this without a second thought. He was just transported into another world, nearly killed, and is being ordered around by an elf... Any particularly good reason he hasn't thought about home much? Like I said before, you're not showing off his personality enough. So far he's pretty boring and there's nothing special about him. I don't know any traits and you've yet to give him any real characteristics. Three chapters in and I still don't like the MC. Not a good sign. I know you've said that he gets better but that doesn't matter. You need to make your MC likable in the beginning so your reader wants to see how your MC continues to progress through the story.
I really get the feel of the whole RPG thing with the Classes, attributes, their equipment, the len's description, how they gain experience, etc. I don't know how much I like it, though. It lacks originality. Now, when people hear that, I tend to get the same response: nothing's original now, everything's cliche, there's nothing wrong with that, blah, blah, blah... When I say it's not original, I'm not bashing you for using all those concepts that have been used before. I realize that pretty much every idea of a story is derived from another story or a collection of them. What makes your story original is when you add small details and ideas to these already existing ideas and basically make it your own. There's no twist, no exceptions, no unexpected ideas. Everything is fairly predictable; travel to place, meets enemy, defeat enemy, gain experience, level up, become stronger, defeat boss, save the princess, and so on. I am no insinuating that your story sounds like that, I'm just using it as an example.
The biggest problem I see is you're not hinting many ideas or details that the reader could use to wonder what will happen in latter chapters. Even if it does get better and plot begins to skyrocket, the reader doesn't know when that will happen. You have to lead them into the direction of thinking that it will happen soon, or give them a sense of curiosity and then they'll want to know what will happen. Other than that, grammar and that stuff seems to be good. Again, I'd polish dialogue a bit. Like I said, I'm just not a fan of RPG's and whatnot so this review my be a bit too harsh. Either way, your story seems to be popular so you must be doing something right. ;) Keep up the good work!
| Guest 10/25/12 . chapter 17
when will he use curses tho?
| TheBloodEdge 10/24/12 . chapter 17
Hurray for 100 reviews, courtesy of meeeeeeee! But really, congrats! Here's to a thousand reviews for BladeArc!
Damn, looks like the second arc's gonna be darker than this one. People are gonna start dying huh? And I'm guessing Yuuto's gonna be plagued with sadistic choices and the dark power he has will completely take over him.
This harem party's getting crazy.
Kamui came off motherly at first, but now you've cemented that she's a no nonsense person who is willing to take a life for the bigger picture. She'll still save Yuuto from those pesky death flags, I'm sure of that.
Ennis and Claire's relationship may or may not be a huge conflict driver. They seem fine enough with each other, but if say the group had to split and Ennis and Claire were alone together, what would happen then?
Princess Liara is still young so I'm sure that lack of experience may be a problem in the governing of the kingdom, but so far, everything seems fine. Oh well.
Ludd definitely seems like he's got a hidden agenda up. At this climatic point of the story, he's nowhere to be found, he's planning something, I'm sure of it. Whether it will hinder the Harem Warriors or not, that's up to debate.
Miya seems pretty pointless in this story really. She's the platypus. She doesn't do much.
Now, [the Reaper]. A total enigma who knows everything but does whatever out of boredom. She and Mark from FTTS share one thing in common. They both hate being bored. I'm sure she'll do something real horrific for the sake of fun.
And for goodness sake Yuuto. PICK SOMEONE ALREADY!
| TheBloodEdge 10/24/12 . chapter 16
I read this chapter thinking about the thousand things Yuuto could do to Claire. That Domination Mark has a really wide perverse potential... Of course, I'm sure it'll play a part in the plot. Maybe it'll work like Suzaku's Live Geass and give Claire super-superhuman abilities?
That story [the Reaper] told Yuuto will have a significant impact on the plot. Called it.
Also, [Love] is just as powerful as [Death]! They summon brackets in dialogue!
Yuuto! You love Ennis! Just admit it and solve the harem! Or do you love basking in the glory of your harem? Hmph. Pervy geek. Or just choose Claire. C'mon, y'know you want to!
Also, chocolate banana. Can't help but think that [the Reaper] was eating it erotically...
| Boomerkid 10/24/12 . chapter 17
I am definitely very, very late on reviewing this story. Especially considering that i read one of your previous works you've taken down, without reviewing that one too, let's just say that I kind of feel bad, because you're one of my favorite writers on here. XP
Sword Art Online. That was what I first thought when came upon this. But now this story feels very different from the former, with Yuuto having quite the dedicated harem of sorts alongside him! When I first saw Claire, I thought "Finally, Yuuto has a male rival of sorts." Then the end of chapter 14 came, and I collapsed to my knees.
I commend you on your references to mythologies, and I'm definitely keeping my eye on Ludd because of the names of his weapons. And as usual, your characters are likable with nice and fun interactions between them, though I personally think that Ennis could use more flavor in switching between tsun and dere. It's nice to see Yuuto's subtle growth, and sure looking forward to more along with the other characters in this second arc of yours! The little details of things in the background like Kamui cleaning the blood off her katana with the clothes of fallen warriors (which is quite true to the little of what I know about combat), and lots more I've unfortunately forgotten, add even more life to the story.
I sense some more Type-Moon influence, now regarding Fate/Stay Night after hearing Kamui discussing to Yuuto regarding the "kill one, save ten or so" thing. Reminds me of when you wrote Legend of Nura with Tsukihime influences. Just like to point it out because I find it nice to note.
As for your writing style, I'm very accustomed to it and its a great pleasure to read. Though I think that maybe your characters could stutter a bit less. Still, I like Yuuto's voice, and I enjoy your story every time I read. All the best!
| TheBloodEdge 10/24/12 . chapter 15
You know, before this, I always read Claire's lines in the voice of Johnny Young Bosch cause (s)he reminded me of Guy from Tales Of The Abyss. Now I read it in the stereotypical shy girl voice. But I decided to have some fun so I read this chapter twice, the first with the shy girl voice, and the second with Bosch's. So to say, it was terrible. Horrifying.
"Yuuto, i-if you don't mind… W-would you like to… umm… take a bath t-together with me?"
Read it in Bosch's voice. C'mon!
Okay, enough screwing around.
Claire is easily my most favorite character now. Can't help but pity the bifauxnen. And the way she acts around Yuuto, screw Ennis, I'm rooting for Claire!
Reaper is ambiguously evil as usual and having fun screwing with Yuuto and Ludd... Ludd's a traitor or something. He's too cool. He's not gonna stick around.
The dark power's gonna bite Yuuto in the ass one day. I just know it. He'll probably go berserk on his harem.
Double Arc! Awesomesauce.