When I first looked at this, I wasn't sure if it was a story or a poem. Now that I've read it, I see that it IS a story. My one suggestion would be NOT to center your paragraphs, but to put them to the left margin instead. It just makes it look cleaner and easier to read.

I really like the way you introduced Kaitlyn. The short sentences at the beginning are punchy and very effective.

I'm looking forward to seeing what happens to them in Texas. :)