|Reviews for The Curse of Ezekiel Mantavio: Friends and Enemies|
| Amanda 12/28/12 . chapter 26
You don’t need a line break between “somevun told me” and “I also know…” also, you either need to stick with the german accent spelling or simply tell us that he spoke with an accent. The latter would be much easier. Just keep it consistent.
| Amanda 12/28/12 . chapter 25
It’s, “anyway” and not, “anyways.”
Do you mean, “go ahead” when you wrote, “ask ahead?” Or perhaps, “ask anyway?”
I still feel this training is very rushed and still feel like Zeke is really eager to teach something he JUST learned to his apprentice. You are not a master of anything upon just learning it. These things take time and practice. Even the title of this chapter refers to this training as “the basics.” And yet, Zeke believes as soon as he maters the basics he will automatically become a Great Hero? I understand he has always been slated for such a position. But I feel there is a process, a long process, that leads to this title.
You describe energy as being energizing. That’s like describing blue as having a blue hue.
I do like the idea of each energy manipulator as having their own color. That’s a pretty interesting concept. I wonder what color is Chognitog?
| nannyandpotocrazy 12/16/12 . chapter 37
Alright, Zeke, so I promised I would review after I updated, so I did. I am very proud. Not only did your chapters lengthen a bit(I like the one thousand word thing going on) but your writing quality has even improved. :) Update soon!
| nannyandpotocrazy 11/6/12 . chapter 32
I know it took me a while to review, but I've gotten my Internet back. So now I can read Fanfiction all I want again. Anyways, I've said it once, and I'll say it again. Longer chapters are needed. I know it took you awhile to update, but you have GOT to try for one thousand works per chapter. Next time, don't post anything until you have hit one thousand words. :)
| the clockwork gallery 10/29/12 . chapter 30
| nannyandpotocrazy 9/21/12 . chapter 28
A lot longer!
| the clockwork gallery 9/21/12 . chapter 28
I am so jealous of your updating skills.
| nannyandpotocrazy 9/11/12 . chapter 27
Much MUCH longer.
| nannyandpotocrazy 9/11/12 . chapter 26
Even though the accent was German, I pictures McGonagall's Scottish... Odd?
| nannyandpotocrazy 9/11/12 . chapter 25
White... Such a PURE color...
| nannyandpotocrazy 9/11/12 . chapter 24
I'm reading again! Anyways, I know how you kept nagging me, so I finally gave in. I have decided I will review all of the chapters I have missed. Did I miss any in Running and Hiding?
| the clockwork gallery 9/4/12 . chapter 27
| Swallow-tailed Kite 8/31/12 . chapter 6
e.e To be very, very, very, very blunt... this story's not to my taste. It's pretty illogical, lack descriptions, and have A/Ns all over the place. On the other side, it does have some humor to it, and the plot seems okay, but it's not my type. Sorry if I offended you, good job, and I wish you luck.
| Swallow-tailed Kite 8/31/12 . chapter 1
Uh, for "Why have these five figures gathered here?, Who are they?, and What effect will this event have on the world?"
You don't need the commas after the question mark, or question marks before the commas. The last 'What' doesn't need to be capitalised either. Only the 'and' does, if you chose the question mark over the comma.
| Amanda 8/22/12 . chapter 24
Interesting lesson and you went into the right amount of detail. Good descriptions. Their interatcions are getting better.