|Reviews for Death Callers|
| Loraine Wentworth 9/5/12 . chapter 5
This is a very bitter-sweet chapter. A lot of emotion is conveyed here very effectively through some poignant character interactions.
I didn't notice any typos etc in this chapter.
| Loraine Wentworth 9/5/12 . chapter 4
There are some good insights into Aislinn's feelings here and also Kaelin's personality, through his actions. I think the characters are very well defined here.
There might be a few missing commas in this chapter- so have a look out for those.
Anyway, a good chapter, so on to the next...
| Highway Unicorn 9/2/12 . chapter 3
Hellos from RH! :D
*Le gasp* What kind of friend is Kaydynce? It's horrible that she seduced Kaelin when she knw Aislin liked him, and in the vision, she does it yet again? :(
I wonder who the ghost things are...and if they are of threat or freind to Aislin. They did give her the vision...but was it to help her, or make her upset over seeing her loved ones like that?
Anywhos, onto the next chapter!
| MissColly 9/2/12 . chapter 1
Okay, in the beginning I think you should expand on the death call and banshee concept because it just seems you skipped that part. It just goes from talking about that with her friends, and then it switches to her in school and the whole banshee/death caller concept disappears until the very end of the chapter.
But anyway, I really like how you added your own twist to the commonly used plot (the one where you don't see a guy for ages, and when you do he's hot). I also liked that you described the characters appearance and personality without it sounding like you're just listing stuff about them, instead you just added it where it fits.
The ending was a perfect way to end the chapter. But I guess you already know that. But I just wanted to say that this is a very compelling first chapter, and it's one where the reader is intrigued to find out more.
| Loraine Wentworth 9/2/12 . chapter 3
Another good chapter that I had fun reading :)
I think you do a really good job of portraying Aislin's fears and the tragedy that could happen. Her personality comes across well in the dialogue, too.
In some cases I think you could give more description, especially about the setting at the start of this chapter. This would make it easier to visualize the scenes.
| seredemia 8/13/12 . chapter 12
i'm so glad that she's finally starting to tell kaelin now! at first i was worried that he may end up being enemies with her because she refused to tell him anything, and that he might find out on his own and get scared BUT THANK GOD THAT DIDN'T HAPPEN. i'm really liking kaelin as a character now because i like how even though he's human, he's not afraid of aislin :)
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 11
Hmm... I wonder what Kaelin is up to..? Maybe he found out what they were and now he's making everyone shun them so that they can't harm anyone? I'm not sure... but Kaelin's acting suspicious too, so I hope he won't end up being an enemy of Aislin's...
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 10
Okay. I do not like Kaydynce at all. For a minute there, I thought Teagan was going to die as well, so I'm glad Aislin managed to stop her before she did. It's sad that Aaron died though... And I can understand why Kaelin is angry. I would be too if my best friend died and I didn't know anything about what was going on...
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 9
OH MY GOD I KNEW IT. I KNEW I COULDN'T TRUST KAYDYNCE. WTF. NO. NO. AISLIN BETTER SAVE KAELIN BEFORE KAYDYNCE SUCKS HIS LIFE OUT. But wow, I loved how you wrote that vision! So freaky!
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 8
Uh oh. Kaydynce is missing. I have a bad feeling she might start going after dudes again and suck out their energy or whatever it is a succubus does... I hope not. I like Teagan. She seems like a decent friend and is actually nicer than Kaydynce, at least.
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 7
Okay, I don't think I would like to be a Banshee. so basically, anyone they love will die? ouch. what a tragic outcome. that really sucks but it adds such a heartbreaking romance into everything... maybe aislin will just try to let go of kaelin so that he'll be saved in the future? that will be sad... :(
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 6
It was nice to see her with her mother and that they get along really well. I thought it was sweet when they started throwing food at each other :') Plus, I love the ending line in this chapter. It really goes well with Aislin's situation, and it's pretty good that her mother went through the same thing. I just hope that Aislin doesn't have to go through the same heartbreak..
| seredemia 8/10/12 . chapter 5
Aw. Just when I thought that Kaelin and Aislin were going to get together and she was somehow going to find a way to change his death, he had to go and accidentally mess it up. Then again, it's nice that there's more drama because it makes things more interesting. I'd like to see what Kaelin does to make Aislin forgive him.
| seredemia 8/9/12 . chapter 4
OH YAY THEY KISSED. I thought it was really sweet and I was really happy to see that happen :3 I'm a sucker for romance, and I enjoy reading about Aislin and Kaelin's relationship so far. It'll be nice to see flashbacks of their past too so that we know how they met and why Aislin ended up liking him as well. It was also pretty interesting to see Kaydynce like that and what her powers are like. Pretty lethal, huh..? Scary best friend is scary.
| Highway Unicorn 8/7/12 . chapter 2
"Her grip was strong it was like detaching a leach that had just latched on" should be "Her grip was strong; it was like detaching a leach that had just latched on."
I feel bad for Kaelin, he only wants to help but he's getting ushered around everywhere. And it's going to suck when he finds out he's going to have to die.