Wow. This is beautiful. I like the repetition and the symbolic parallel of a relationship and a building.

Hi. I liked the idea of telling a story of a love story through a church. The poem just seemed more like a short narrative than a poem. It wasn't clear who the "ours" in the story was, but I get the children turned to lovers thing. There were some misspells, like alter-altar in the 4th paragraph so you might want to revisit.

The imagery is good though. Most of the descriptions were nice and vivid.

Anyway keep writing! :)