|Reviews for White Lines|
| Natari Mirumura 5/19/12 . chapter 1
Wow. This is one of the most unique and dark poems I read by far. Amazing job, keep it up .
| dragonflydreamer 5/13/12 . chapter 1
[No backbone to support my empty skull.] I love this image.
[Forcing bloody words past the lump in my throat.] Also a good one. Very visceral.
[Forcing together words into some awkward mixture,/of prose and poetry,] I love how the words have a sort of awkward feel to them as you're describing it.
[would stumble upon my Frankenstein of words,/would be loved by my bloody words.] I like the phrase "Frankenstein words" and also the repeated structure with "would," but the repetition of "words" is too much and loses the effect.
Nice piece overall. The emotion is something I've seen written about quite a bit before, but I love the descriptions you have, especially those relating to words and getting them out. Strong ending, too.