Hmm... An interesting romance, one I defintely plan on reading. Your plotline so far is great, with an interesting setting.

However, your characters can do with a little more fleshing out, and a few grammar and spelling checks; simple things, like 'were' instead of 'where', and slightly off word order and punctuation errors in a few instances but otherwise clean. A great idea and a brave undertaking for a guy! Truly impressive!

Perhaps, if you're interested, I could be an informal beta reader for you to polish this. Just an open suggestion, so pm me whenever you like with whatever response.

Keep up the writing!:)