Very well written indeed. Sadly, I cannot read the whole of your story just yet, but I will get around to it. Presently, I have only one thing to point out. Kyrral. I hadn't a clue as to who Kyrraly was when you introduced him- he just suddenly appeared. It had me befuddled for a few moments. But other than that, it was excellent, and I look foreward to reading more.

ahh~!~ this story is so good! but den...da endings a lil confusng...@_@

The story is great! but even though it is great it is kinda draggy i mean it does not really make me want to read more. If u would like to try and make it more interesting and try to make it grasp the reader. Good luck writeing!! ^_~

WAH!
That was a GOOD story.
I wish that it didn't have to end, though.
Oh well.
Moonie

OK THIS AS I SAID BEFORE RULES.but htis cant be the end im not shure if i want to join but i do want to know what happenes and why there are only like 7 reviews!!!!!!!! maybe people dont like to read such long storys i love long storys any who did u wright any more storys if so i want ti read them or if any other storys are wrighten about this place and just a few questions and sugestions u should wright a history for this story and the charecters. and there world any way i love it and i will look for more storys from u. i love story about woman comming out on the top in thing male domminated. any way keep it up.please

i wasnt going to review again till the end but omg make him come back this is not fair to us unexpecting readers. any who this story is great so far

i know that it is a fact of life but why did they have to die. ok ki got that out of my way soooooo i love the way u wright. did one person wright this or is it a group thing or is it the story behind your rpg. i have a friend who plays d&d but there storysd are never like this.this rules ok i am only on chapter 10 so i have to keep reading i will give a really long review at the end.

Keep writing.

OhmygoshIneedsomemoreknowbeforeIgointoepilepticseizures!!!!!!! That was written incredibly good!!! You must be an excellent role-player!! I've been thinking about joining...but...I don't think I could get the history and everything else I'd need to know down. And I'm not the sort of person who can rp a SB without knowing it inside and out, it would just be bad...But anywho, I really hope you get some more chapters up soon! Keep up the good work!

Cooool ^___^
Yannow, you could publish this o.o And if you keep writing.....

You could make a lotta dough O_o But that's just me. Moooola +.+ Uh, anyhow. That's really awesome ^__^ Keep writing, and keep typing up the rest o' that story!

I loved it!!! I can't wait for more. I hope you write really, really fast.