|Reviews for Depressing Beauty|
| isadonicus 6/26/12 . chapter 1
are you depressed or something why write all this sad stuff be happy
| DewleafWolf 5/17/12 . chapter 1
I know you're probably thinking, "Oh GOD, not THIS person again!" But hey, I saw you were a relatively new writer here, and I like giving criticism. :)
I don't see any errors here, and I like the story, but maybe the ONLY thing I would say is that the paragraphs could be a bit longer. I'm not saying make every action more explained and detailed, because it is meant to be short story, but every paragraph here is a single line on the screen. It's quite jumpy.
Nevertheless, good story! I can't find anything else to scrutinize. :P And trust me, normally I just read a story and leave a simple review. I only give annoying perambulations to authors I like! :)