|Reviews for Outlaw|
| AnonymousLily 6/12/12 . chapter 1
Hi Dreamer- this is very different! Does the stallion fit the stereotype? Or is it the thief who does? I loved the image "shadowing cape billowing," could see the come hither darkness as well as the speed away from the crime. The bounty is your heart? Loved "the future reflected in his eyes"- we just know he's off to gather more female hearts! "The thief gallops into fast approaching night" is lovely (I dropped the 'the'). I would make the bounty he took more obiviously the narrator's heart and end on fast approaching night- because it's approaching night in all its despair for the narrator as well. Nice!