Ohhh Very dark.. Very intriguing :D There's a few places where the rhyme scheme seems slightly off, but aside from that it was amazing! :P
As a side-note, the comma in "To me this was, a bit of an attraction" seems kinda unnecessary, but it might be deliberate.. just thought i'd point it out :)

The first half definitely made it for me.. Amazing...

Keep it up! :)

What a mean man.

I like this although there are a few typos. go back and fix those and this poem will be 100% amazing.

This is actually very interesting. It would make a good story. Of course I believe every great idea could make a good story lol. But you could really feel the emotions. Hurt. Broken. Upset. Used. Infuriated. Great poem XD

this is great, and its something i thikn a lot of people (including me) can relate too. good job :)

Oh I loved this one! I love how it was like a story. Wonderful! :)

This is written quite well. I found a few errors, and could point them out to you if you like, but other than that, it was good. I like how full of emotion it was. Keep up the good work. :)

"I pulled the trigger and shot her dead.

Her blood mixed with her tears, everything shed."

I love that line, and I love this poem; the rhyme really emphasise the emotion.

Good job on the rhyming! It looks appealing to the eyes and sounds pleasant to the ears.

The slam poem feel to this is nice. You've used a lot of emotive words and expressions, and I can imagine a person acting this out.

The narrative is written nicely, and the events of what happen flow well.

As for improvement, there are minor typos (not the sort that really detract from the story). Other than that, I can't say much. Keep up the good work.

I loved it. The imagery you used painted a perfect picture in my head, and it flowed so greatly like a leaf in a pond of calm water. I can't wait for more!

I love how descriptive you were about how you felt and what you did. This poem is longer than any poem I've ever written. But that is because I'm not good at writing long pieces,like stories. I love how the poem told a story. Meanwhile, my poems only tell you a little bit of a story. I hope that one day I will be able to write a strong poem like this.

wow. that was a good one!

keep it up!

always wanting more