|Reviews for Why?|
| purplepam 12/20/12 . chapter 1
Wow! I really like the way you wrote this poem! Great job!
| Fair Charlotte 8/1/12 . chapter 1
That's really good, I can deffinately relate, nice work.
| SkinnyLove203 7/31/12 . chapter 1
This is awesome.
But I will say - you ask why a lot don't you haha just kidding :)
awesome stuff xx
| RiyaJoy 7/20/12 . chapter 1
This is so heart touching. I love your poem.
| Saki Kikkio Ohayashi 7/20/12 . chapter 1
You are a true poet
| Guest 7/18/12 . chapter 1
Your rhythm is choppy and your rhyme is inconsistent. Poetry is supposed to flow, and this poem lacks a bit of that.
However, the message is clear and beautiful. Everyone feels this way some time in their life, and you have done a good job putting it into words.
| musicfreak99 7/2/12 . chapter 1
First off, you are not worthless... I may not know you, but I now that much about you.
Second, this is very relatable for other people who are feeling the same way.
| Nalledia 6/26/12 . chapter 1
A beautiful poem, as always. I can definitely relate to it, and these are questions I often ask myself. Well done on yet another moving piece!
| DougieM 6/22/12 . chapter 1
This is really good, nearly everyone almost always has a 'why' question on their lips.
| bookppl93 6/21/12 . chapter 1
This poem really makes you think. I have a problem with not always speaking up for myself, but I don't know why I don't.
| rust phoenix 6/19/12 . chapter 1
I'm really sorry you feel that way. You are a talented writer and seem like a really good person.
| LectorGirl32 6/18/12 . chapter 1
Very interesting poem you have here. I believe every person at some point has issues just as you are having. But being able to express yourself through words is good thing. When I read through your questions of life this is what I think. :)
I always wonder questions about myself, always want to know.
Like why I am hated, why is that so?
Some people can be so cruel!
Why do others have problems with me?
Is it because I can't smile, or break free?
Sometimes the hardest thing to do is to love yourself. And once you have done that you can smile and break free and see that not everyone has problems with you. They are fighting their own demons as well.
Why am I so boring?
Everything I do always leaves others snoring.
You are far from boring. Take a look at how you express yourself through words.
Why do I easily get betrayed?
Why can't anything ever be array?
B/c you want to see the good in people not the bad.
Why when I love, it always turns out meaningless?
Why can't I live a life filled with simple blissfulness?
B/c it was not really love.
Why do I always sulk in the past?
Why can't I move on like you have, allowing my present to last?
B/c your HUMAN!
Why am I ugly, my appearance similar to a beast?
Why am I dumb, my limited knowledge for all to see?
Why am I shy, everywhere I go?
Why do I cry, even in the frigid snow?
B/c you are who you are. You can either bite your lip and jump out there or be left behind. It takes time and courage.
Its your bodies way of trying to convince you of something.
Why am I so difficult, so easy to ignore?
Why do others pick on me, in the eye of the storm?
B/c they are not happy with themselves they must find amusement in another's pain.
Why do you mock me, when you know my life is Hell as it is?
Why can't I disappear, I know I won't be missed.
You will be miss by the one who deserve your love, friendship, etc
Why don't I have somebody, anybody to lean on?
I know I am weak, thus I need to be strong.
There is always someone there for you in one shape or form. :)
Your not weak just hurt and learning
Why do I think everything will be okay, yet it never turns out to be?
Why do I live a lie, for all of humanity to see?
It is all apart of growing up. Your life is what you make it. Trust me I have been down this road also.
Why can't I find peace here on Earth?
Why am I always pushed down into the dirt?
Once you find peace with yourself the rest will follow
Why can't I speak my mind, like others can?
Why can't I get on my two feet for once, and stand?
You afraid of what others will say when you do state your mind that is why. Life by the model who care what people think. What makes them right?
Why does my life always pass me by?
Why is it salvation, I still pry?
Everyones life flies by. You have to take yours by the reins and enjoy the ride.
Why can't I just drop dead?
My last death wish be done upon my bed.
B/c there is so much out there to see and enjoy. Life is not so bad really.
Why do I ask so many questions?
Why do I wonder?
Why is my life always bringing about thunder?
B/c you are at war with your mind.
Why, why, why, is all I ask.
Why not live a life hiding behind a mask?
(At least that will last.)
I was not trying to dissect your poem. I was just stating some things that come to my mind when you throw out all the questions. Trust me I have been down this road and it is a hard one to over come but it is possible. :)
You ever need someone to talk to you are welcome to contact me for anything. Very Good Poem!
LectorGirl aka April
Why, is all I say.
It is the question of my yesterday and today.
| LeoValdezgirl77 6/18/12 . chapter 1
a good poem with a good meaning, but the rythm was off. it didn't really flow right as far as th meter goes.
The words were great and creative though and i liked it.
| AnonymousLily 6/16/12 . chapter 1
I liked the set up of so many questions- all linked to interacting with other people. It's hard to be shy! I know I sometimes start down this path and have to STOP and do something weird or fun just to escape the mental loop of beating oneself up. I think on some level most people feel like this at times- it's a painful trap. It's good we're poets to get it out on the page and leave it behind that way!
| Valenteen 6/11/12 . chapter 1
Well written and well done. Yet again, touching and emotive. Very clever rhyming and very true,