Oh snap.

There was a moment whilest reading chapter one that I thought he really was going to snap her neck like a twig...

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To Lucifer, I would say "If you weren't a demon, I'd beat the living crap out of you."

Holy crap on a cracker awkward!

I feel the need to make an awakward turtle sign for Ray Ann.

*happy face*

Penelope is adorable.

Oooo Burn on that last line!

:)

If my friends forced me to change my outfit, I'd be like "Why don't you love me the way I am!? Love me the way I am!" in an overly dramatic fasion.

Haha the minute i saw there wasn't a next chapter my first words were "What. The. #$#!" and then i read the note and was like "Chill Staci..Sequel." That was a really good story:)

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Mysterious ending. So that explains why he doesn't want Ray Ann, I guess? That should be a good backstory to come.

And I knew I was going to like Penelope! I liked her in this chapter because she's helping the relationship progress at a good rate.

A lot of typos. A quick re-read before posting should help that.

I like the hints of Vander's demonic powers. It's a good balance - you're not throwing too much in all at once, just enough to be interesting.

I also like the makeover thing. She was at a party before and kind of throwing herself at a guy, so it was interesting to see that she is kind of uncomfortable with being done up like this.

Watch out for run-on sentences. You have a lot in this chapter which makes the writing hard to get into.

Aw, I love Penelope. Interesting different dynamic to throw in between these characters.

Meh. The end. There's so much potential for sexual tension there, but you really rushed through it. Just try stretching the dialogue out a little longer so there's more of a scene to it.