Hey there, just thought I'd review your story because no one has done you the curtosey (Spelling SKILLS.) yet.

This is pretty well written, it held my attention, which is pretty hard to do, I have the attention span of a goldfish, and it was exciting. The charactor was believeable and realistic.

My only complaints lie in the number of sentance fragments throughout the piece, which can easily be fixed with commas (I.e I like cake. But I also like ice cream VS. I like cake, but I also like ice cream) and I would have liked a bit more description, show not tell right?

Good job! I hope you continue writing in the future!

See ya,

Claire