|Reviews for You're Never Gonna Fit In Much Kid|
| Don'tStopMeNow 6/20/12 . chapter 2
I really like this. Certain quotes make me smile like "the sound of narcissistic bitches moaning about their outfits." Just brilliant! :)
And I laughed quite literally out loud at the line of the suckling my teat, that was just gross but said in the most loving way.
But something that I noticed is that I think you should input more imagery in between dialogue because it makes it much easier to imagine what's going on. So it's nice to have a mix instead of a block of imagery/thoughts, and a block of cold-cut dialogue.
Prime example would be the bit where she's dazing off and her mother yells. It's easier to imagine if you explain like a look on her face, or drowning out her mom's voice or whatever less cheesy thing you can think of.
Just a bit of my critique, update soon!
| Don'tStopMeNow 6/5/12 . chapter 1
So honestly what attracted me to this story was the title. Which I'm guessing you got from the song Teenagers by My Chemical Romance, please tell me if I'm wrong haha.
I really liked the line, burning passion, sex on fire, never thought of it that way. :)
And I also like chicken...
| Felicia Huey 5/28/12 . chapter 2
I liketh this. Primrose is probably my favorite person ever :)
| Felicia Huey 5/22/12 . chapter 1
I can tell ima like this. XD
Gosh, its awfully convienient how her name is Primrose. Reminds me of some other super popular book character ;)
Anyway. Do continue darling.