i like this it seems good i think you need to continue with this dont give up

This is a really spectacular story, having just finished reading it again. I can honestly say that I've forgotten how much I enjoyed reaading it the first time: I do hope that you will not abandon this, even if you take a month to write a chapter, because it really deserves to be finished. Believe me, it's amazing.
Glo in jouself, vriendin! Jy weet wat jy doen met hierdie storie, en jy moet aangaan met hom:D

I'm intrigued by this chapter, but I feel like it's a bit too stiff and formal. Try relaxing your tone, and your dialogue. I am really impressed by the formality though, it shows you can actually write, formal is usually harder for most people.

Ooh! I loved this! It's very well written and you have a great way of describing things. I really enjoyed it and I look forwards to the next chapter!

Loved it.