There are some basic mistakes here, like 'then' rather than 'than', words missed out in sentences and repeats of the same basic information. If you proofread a little closer, or get someone else to, it'll make it easier to read. :)
Update soon please :)

The story premise didn't interest me at all, but your prose is absolutely top-notch!

I like it a lot. It is A-MAZING. :D You might be interested in our collaboration story, 4.
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How it little pheonix

shouldnt that it be a his

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When typing cor a letter it makes it easier on the reader if you change the font style so we can tell the diference. And who was zach again?

And so it has begun. The teror that will only be known as the Reaper.

Love the concept, and I'm hooked.
However, there are spelling and grammatical errors which detract from the story. If you sort them out it will make it much easier to read.
Also, some of your descriptions and sentences are too long. If you break them up more, again it will improve the whole story.
Can't wait for you to finish it. :)

hahahahahahahaha. serves the bastards right. go autumn go and reap your vengeance

for a month? hope theres a bathroom. i dont like his mom, she racist

stupid runner. anyway at least she is beggining to open up

i hope things end well for them

yeah, this is some messed up shit

is this luke the same luke or a different luke

man, they cant move away or anything? thats messed up bro

seems like a drab life. but i thought that you said the girls left and the giuys stayed. im not saying thats right but you said that, and then you have two trains

hmmm. it seems interesting. i shall continue reading