you are doing fine just update this story.

Nice, I honestly thought i'd never see this thing get updated, but anyway the story is very intersting and I hope you continue with it.

oh we'll stay around for you hope you get betterso that you can finish this wonderfull story.

Ohmygosh! Igra is adorable! Clueless, clueless.

For some reason this story made me fist pump the air when I found it.

This story is awsome sauce!

Of course aliens are real it would make less sence if they were not.

I'll say that this is one of the more interesting stories I've encountered here on FP. I've noticed a few errors, but I'll let it slide... Well, not really. You use 'of' instead of 'have' or something else many times. At first I thought it was an error, that only would happen once, but I guess it's got something to do with where you're from. It's a nice story, I like the idea behind plasma-carbon windows, and I still am a bit confused when Igra says that the only feelings his race has are those 3, but I'm so sure that he has others. It wouldn't surprise me either, if he developed feelings, akin to love, for Dibra.

Good story, needs furbishing, but I like how you describe it, both from Dibra's and Igra's point of view.

Wow, you update a lot! That's so awesome xD

"Earth to Dibra" literally made me laugh out loud. It's just so ironic, it's beautiful :p

Hey,

Just a couple things, very good though!

getting in there groups. s/b: getting in (their) groups

you don't start play s/b: you don't start (to) play

Only other thing is maybe a few missing commas...I'm bad with them so I'm not the best judge...

Would Keith really 'rat-out' another kid in class? I would think that would get him 'social capital punishment' in the teen world.

Again, it's your story/world.

John

Hey,

This is the only small thing I noticed! Good job! Coo-does!

too cute to her boyfriend s/b: too cute to (be) her

In a real high school situation, she wouldn't been alone in a room with a person not on her school contact list. Someone would/should have stopped him and/or called 911 if he kicked in a classroom door. The school would have been on lock down before they made it to the front door. If it got that far, Tony would have lost his job letting them leave...

Now, after my little rant, you are writing a sci-fi story, so you can create your own world/situations. It's your story.

John

Dude, I wish I got random free classes. Lucky Dibra and lucky Liz and lucky 's class.

Great chapter, as usual :p

Hey,

More little things,

as he walks out the factory s/b as he walks out of the

and make the fall look good s/b and makes the wall look good

He his another panel outside s/b He hits ? another panel

It's is unfurnished s/b It's unfurnished

I review my stories 5 and 6 times and still find things I missed.

Cops running away? Like I say it's your story...

Keep going. I like the tongue-in-cheek humor...

John

John

Hey,

More small things..

It seems to of understood... s/b It seems to have understood

as he looks at my amazed. s/b ? face? look?

your race is they're acceptable s/b your race is acceptable

just leave please in peace s/b just leave us in peace

something malfunction inside s/b something malfunctioning

will accept us as alleys s/b will accept us as allies

who can't right there way s/b who can't fight their way

shipped from there from other s/b shipped there from other

I liked the humor, I actually chuckled out loud...

"I wanted to meet an alien! Not kiss an alien!"

John

Hey,

Small things,

That's is like... s/b That's like the...

and old, blue paint... s/b and old blue paint

to clear up m vision... s/b to clear up my vision

also adorned it a metallic s/b also adorned in a metallic

That's all I noticed...

'I have a dad who doesn't really care what I do...' really?

Just comments, as I always say in any review I do, it's your story, you develop plot and characters as you wish...

John