|Reviews for Goodbye, Blue Sky|
| Emptiness-Is-All-You-Know 6/29/12 . chapter 8
Again, engaging and plot flowing along quite nicely. I like the bottom paragraph as you show some more description there (as mentioned in previous review) and that is a nice change from all the dialogue.
I hope Dale isn't dead :O No way!
| Emptiness-Is-All-You-Know 6/29/12 . chapter 7
Another good chapter. If I had any pointers it would be that this one seems mainly dialogue and read to me more like a play that a piece of fiction. Please don't take that the wrong way, what I mean is sometimes it feels like you miss out description in favour of dialogue and therefore sometimes is like "Jack said..." then this happened "Kai said" etc. Maybe expand a little on descriptions of the environment and stuff and it could be that bit better :)
| Circles in the Water 6/28/12 . chapter 4
So you're a really good writer. End of.
I really like the lay out of the first person perspective. Everything is happening in the now and it's really easy to get swept along with the ride. I was enthralled to read more from the first paragraph to the story. Great job!
| Aellepi 6/27/12 . chapter 6
And we meet the others. I wonder what exactly it is that May is so defensive about. Can't be just the fact that she's a she. Lin is a she as well. The small stature? A kid? A midget? Hmm... Maybe some other thing about her looks that set her apart? Something we still don't know about this culture?
What city did that place use to be? Ken- what? Huhuu... :3
By the way, you've forgotten a name here:
"Is something eluding you, Sunshine?" Somebody emerges into the circle of light."Is this not what you expected to see?" He's about _'s age . But his dark hair's shot through with streaks of grey already.
| Aellepi 6/27/12 . chapter 5
*facepalm* Andrei, you idiot... Who in their right mind would give their real name away like that? Seriously. If he doesn't want to be dead soon, he has to be a quick learner. *shakes head* What idiocy.
But, the Reapers killed off his Pa? Iiiinteresting... And his bro, whose name I've already forgotten (way to go, me), is on the Reapers' side even then? Or would he be a inside man? ;) I wonder...
| Aellepi 6/27/12 . chapter 4
Darn. I should have remembered to read on earlier. *angry at self* This is getting really, really good. :3 But I wonder how Aaron heard that there might be some trouble waiting for Andrei at home... How and where and from whom. So suspicious.
Also, love the name Cyrus. Always have, always will. -
| Scarlet-SKull 6/17/12 . chapter 4
Gotta ask you first what does this fifty sides to a coin pertain to? lol This chapter was interesting. I see how you got that title too : p Andrei is so hard headed sometimes ... I mean always. Ha
Is that cat in the end supposed to represent something? Oh, just got a spark from that question! (ideas ideas!) Keep on writing! I see you're getting better at your overall tone of the story.
| Aellepi 6/17/12 . chapter 3
Ahh, I see. So the Reapers and the masked men are NOT the same people. Hmm... I'm rather happy about that. :D I kinda liked the masked persons. The Reapers seem like bastards. But I wonder why they have to go around killing people. I mean, even if I don't like them (for now), that doesn't mean they don't have a good reason for killing them people.
The Masked blew up the HQ, didn't they? And the General with it. And this is why the Masked told Andrei he might want to find them... Right? - (Or something close enough to that.) Getting really interesting.
| Aellepi 6/17/12 . chapter 2
Oh, darn... Forgot to log on. Well, whatever. :3
I like this. So mysterious. Yes, me likey that. I wonder if the narrator is going to become like them mask fellows. The Reapers? Are they the same people? It would seem so, but you can never know. Well, not yet at least. :P
By the way, loved the "There are fifty sides to a coin". *_* So amazing. You come up with the strangest things to use as metaphors or sayings or any such. Like the rose thing in the ever-changing other story.
So curious to see what happens when the planes come. I'm going to be reading on
| Aellepi 6/15/12 . chapter 1
Hoo, interesting. I wonder what's going on here... Reapers? What do the Reapers need the people they pick for? Oh, darn. The gunshots. They were picked out to be killed? :/ Poor them. I hope the 'their boys' will save them soon.
Other than that, "The fighting's stopped hours ago." And the mention of a Wall... Something to do with a fight/war as well? I wonder which side won. Well, obviously the side where the Reapers are on, but... meh.
I like the way you've written this. *nods head* Really do. Only a few words, but they are enough to convey the meaning.
I'll be reading on. But, ah. Later. -'' It's late already. Gonna review more tomorrow
| Moofininja 6/15/12 . chapter 8
Man I just totally feel like I'm right there with them! I like that you leave a lot up to the reader to determine and picture.
| Moofininja 6/15/12 . chapter 7
This chapter really makes your heart beat! I feel like I'm right there with them, looking all around, nervous as all heck, while Andrei pulls down the flag.
I love May; she's so eccentric and cute, one of my favorite kinds of character.
| Moofininja 6/15/12 . chapter 6
I loove that you brought up the title in this chapter. That's always a good couple points in my book, adding in subtle things like that. Quite enjoyable!
| Moofininja 6/15/12 . chapter 5
I think this was one of my favorite chapters. I like the introduction of the new characters, and how confusing and hectic the run through the alleyways felt. It's so easy to picture everything that happens, though I do wish you'd add just a tad bit more detail about the city; I want to picture it even more.
As always, I love that you let us in on little bits of the story at a time, like little glimpses into the past.
| Moofininja 6/15/12 . chapter 4
Hehe, I liked that you added that song title it there. It made me smile. :)
Your chapters are short, but that makes it so easy to leave awesome cliffhangers! The more cliffhangers, the more people want to keep reading. ;)
Thanks for writing such an awesome story, by the way. It's so good!