I find that Kyave has a bubbly naive and blunt personality. Like, in this chapter for example, he put out the obvious when a person normally wouldn't. Not to mention he's constantly smiling and very persistent when he wants to be. As to Sh'yan who is reserved and quiet and wants to keep to himself probably from past experiences. Something about that stable boy is special from the time I was introduced to him to now. Not to mention the freaking title!

Here are my theories:

1. Sh'yan is really of royal blood but Queen Malwe stole the crown from him. His royal family probably invested in large amounts of silk making so fine that the queen herself wanted it all for her uses only. Therefore she killed off Sh'yan's family but leaving only Sh'yan to make the silk and just a bridge for his family's secret.

2. Sh'yan is really Queen Malwe's son or someone very close to the woman in some way, shape, or form based off the familiarity she held when asked. This shows Zolok's blatant anger towards Sh'yan jealous that Malwe is giving more attention to Sh'yan. Or better yet! ZOLOK is Malwe's son also (is Sh'yan IS her son) and gaining the power or something like that!

3. Sh'yan is a poor slave who has learned how to weave beautiful silk clothings, Malwe found him, brought him to the palace, made him make her silks.

Those are ideas of mine! Don't know if it's true or not but it was a shot!

I bet you they're going to steal the letter and prevent it from being sent to King Reon! That's just a guess though. Keswa seems more...how do I put it? "Hooty tooty", for lack of a better word, and so...lockdown. it seems like the lovely queen Malwe has keen eyes on certain people in her country. Like the handsome Kyave...or even a certain stable boy. Heemmmm... *strokes beard*

I dun' trust her...I dunno. She's teetering on the edge for me. Too many secrets in this.

Secrets secrets are no fun unless you share with EVERYONE! :D
-Aristotle

. . . .Fucking rite.

And you did very well! I like how Kyave's using the horses as a bridge to get some of that ass. *snickers* You dog you.

So I'm guessing Sheva is a cool place as to Heswa which is warm like the desert yes?

Aw. Sh'yan's ADOWABLE! XD Absolute cutie! I'm excited to see what will happen when worlds collide!

Oh ho ho! Something's a brewing it seems. There's something Mr. Blunt here isn't telling us and I'm sure Kyave and we are going to find out soon.

I was just about to ask you on the characters and their descriptions. Yay! :D They're pretty! I can't wait till we delve into their personalities a little bit more. Plus the countries seem beautiful to live in. AHM JEALOUS!

'Sup?

I don't know if you remember me but I remember you! I'm not sure if I commented under the same name or not but that WAS a looong time ago. But anyways! I've seen you posting this story for a while and decided to check it out. I mean, I saw the last chapter so I'm going to read this story! I mean, the last thing I would want is a story going to waste yeah?

What an interesting place! :D I know nothing of your made up world but I will venture into this creative place and enjoy the plot that will start up eventually. I like the imagination of the names and this whole political aspect going on. Excitement! :D

eu adoro o embaixador, mais o garoto do estabulo e muito fofo, so queria que ele de alguns jeito fica-se juntos. e eu gostaria de ler a historia do rei e o seu marido como eles acabarao junto.. a historia esta linda na para.. ;D

Heya, just a thought for your next chapter cause I know how it sometimes helps to have somebody throw ideas at you cause once you work out what you don't want its usually easier to work out waht you do want to do. Afraid I haven't read the other stuff set here, though I might some time, but anyway, point being, icily polite conversations between dignataries are always fun, you know, the ones where its actually much more terrifying than shouting because they're being so polite. Don't know if this fits in with your dude, but it seems like something your Queen might do. looking forward to some more something :D

Cute story. Please update soon!

I think that tangledoctopus has a point there. If you perhaps makes long gap between chapter then it'll be reasonable to write a long ones. Twice or thrice the lenght you currently write.

And asking readers for idea was..umm, you'd better discuss it with fellow writer.

Overall, i think that Kyave's obliviousness is cuter than Sh'yan. He's way too silent, perhaps you could show his feeling through small movement, like blinking more when nervous or other subtle physical sign. Even when Kyave couldn't see it, the reader could.

You have my support to go through with this fic. You've gone so far. And I'm sure they'll be there when you're ready to go back. Takes some time to calm down and re-read your draft perhaps?

Best regard,
val

I don't really get this chapter. Just that it dangerous for Kyave and Sh'yan to make silk?
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or perhaps I just lack sleep so my brain didn't function at its best.. Haha

val

I like longer chapters. And was about to forget writing review if you had't ask for one.. Really, your fiction just that ensnare me. I'm curious about 'twin something' that was published. Is it available only in your country or not?

Hi. I've been leaving reviews for former the chapters, at least I've been trying to. However, there is the fact that the story is getting for lack of a better word very disorganized. I have a hard time following the scheme or the narrative arc because the chapters are very very very short and they are like a snapshot. But I think the main reason why you are not getting any reviews is because the inter chapter interval, the time between the chapters is toooo long to catch up with the narrative. To be honest, I'm completely lost for the last few chapters. I'm really waiting for you to shape this story into a more comprehensible one. I'm sure you have a theme or check point in your mind but when you present them to us in snippets, personally I can't even think of a point to write a review about because I don't really get the chapter and its place in the story.

Haha, ok, I thought it was nice though:) Is Say'amai the first Mistress?