|Reviews for All About Us|
| whatthegreencarrot 2/5/13 . chapter 10
Ah, excellent, an update. Your grammar and punctuation is really good, I might comment on—I've seen a lot of stories with terrible grammar and whatnot, and it irritates the crap out of me, so I'm thankful that yours is good.
Aww, chemistry between Erik and Annie... Never saw that one coming. (Sarcasm, if you hadn't figured it out.) It's a sweet story, but I've gotta go to school now, or I'd type a longer review (cringes). Sorry.
| whatthegreencarrot 9/23/12 . chapter 4
I really liked the ending. I suppose it shows that Erik isn't all that bad; something good came out of the detention after all, didn't it?
["I trust you haven't forgotten about your detention, Miss Porter," she said, barely disguising her glee.] Her teacher seems fairly nice, but it seems that she's suddenly a bit of a sadist right here. Any reason why?
Ah. Erik, Erik, Erik. You just gotta love him. He's quite amusing, if I do say so myself.
| whatthegreencarrot 9/23/12 . chapter 3
Ah, Annie/Sam bonding time, excellent.
[His rumpled school shirt is untucked and his collar is sticking up, his dark hair is falling carelessly in front of his grey eyes and there's a small scar on his left cheek that's mainly hidden by his hair but illuminated by the moonlight.]
I think that's a bit of a run-on sentence. You could've ended the first sentence at "his collar is sticking up." Then you could've started a new sentence with "His dark hair is falling carelessly" and all that.
It's nice to get to know Sam a bit better, he really doesn't seem that bad, even though he supposedly partook in Annie's torture with Erik. I hope they end up getting along.
| whatthegreencarrot 9/23/12 . chapter 2
Ah, detention... Good for Annie. Not.
There was this one paragraph that made me a bit doubtful, I'll paste it down for you...
["For me?" I flutter a hand against my chest girlishly. "Oh my, how very sweet of you, Erik." I take them from his hand and allow myself to bury my nose in the petals for just a moment, breathing in their sweet scent. Oh wow, I don't think I've ever smelt anything so beautiful before in my life. They feel so smooth and soft against my skin, I want to dive right into the bouquet. I look up at Erik over the top of the roses. He is quite good looking, really, with his chiseled jaw and athletic body… "What have I done to deserve such sweetness?"]
It doesn't seem very likely, since Annie seems to hate Erik immensely. She seems a bit like a fangirl in this—I'm using the term "fangirl" very loosely, so don't get the wrong idea—and I was wondering if it's realistic.
| whatthegreencarrot 9/23/12 . chapter 1
[She speaks with a mouthful; "I don't think Annie's conscious enough to comprehend anything yet] I think that "she speaks through a mouthful" might sound better. Maybe I'm wrong, but... Just a thought.
Stud muffin? Ha, I like it. Erik seems...interesting. This is a nice start to this story, and I'm just going to make my way through the rest of this, reviewing. I like Annie's seeming aversion to formals and pink posters, it gives her character. Most girls seem to like dances and all that.
| scurvykills 7/4/12 . chapter 9
I like your writing style. I am a little disappointed that she seems to be ending up with him, but maybe I am imagining his torturing her for three years more drastically than you have. Personally, I wouldn't forgive so easily, or I would tell the guy that we could possibly be friends after he has proved himself, but that I am not going on a date with a guy who, for the past three years, has shown me absolutely no respect. And even still, he is looking at her body and she has to remind him to look at her face when she is talking. it's almost like she is jumping on his affections because she doesn't have any attentions coming in from anywhere else. But i guess you can't expect much more from a desperate girl, especially when her "friends" are so selfishly working against her.
Though, like I said, I like your flow . Hope no offense in reading my opinion of the content.
| JessicaLynn15 7/3/12 . chapter 9
Annie is definitely not a morning person. Lol. So.. I don't really have anything to say about this chapter so.. I hope you update it soon :)
| chewychester 7/3/12 . chapter 9
| Shockinglightning 6/29/12 . chapter 8
Hope everythings fine! And I love this story! Cant wait for the formal! :) so glad she finally said yes... Sort of. Lol before it was too late. Update if u can! But no rush. Feel better first
| JessicaLynn15 6/29/12 . chapter 8
Yayyy! Finally! She might not have said yes yet, but that was a hint! She's gong to! Woooo! I want Erik. Haha. He should've kissed her. Lol. I thought that was going to happen there for a while.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter :) Say yes Annie, say yes!
| AceTheClown 6/26/12 . chapter 7
Nice backstories 4 sam and erick, though it may be sad. Love your work as always and good luck in your operation and get well soon
| TeaAndCakes 6/25/12 . chapter 7
First of all, get well soon! -
Ok, now for this chapter :)
I loved how you described Molly and Roger. They seem nice together :) Roger is cool and laidback while Molly is hyper and super energetic! Love it! Nice couple right there ;)
It looks like we're all starting to see Erik from another's perspective :3 I bet Annie has another impression of him -
Can't wait for the next chapter! I wonder what's going to happen when Annie talks to Erik .
| JessicaLynn15 6/25/12 . chapter 7
First things first, Get Well Soon!
Okay, now that I got that covered, on to reviewing the chapter.
I really liked this. Roger seems like a pretty cool dude. And to me, Molly acts like a hyper-active poodle or something. Lol. She's just so energetic.
I really did not see that coming. The thing about Sam. I always hate when people get abused. Even if they are just made up. And Erik coming to help him? Even more surprising. That was definitely not like the way we have been hearing about Erik in Annie's perspective.
Well, again, get well soon, and I will be looking forward to another chapter. :)
Luv2write123 AKA Jessie
| AceTheClown 6/16/12 . chapter 6
This stories always leave me looking foward to the next chapter... All the best in you exams
| TeaAndCakes 6/15/12 . chapter 6
Entertaining as always! xD
I love these characters :D
Good luck with your exams and surgery! Oh and fun fun on your holiday!