Hi,

Great idea - there are definitely people of this generation that need a wake up call, their ability to think for themselves non existent.

The only things I picked up on were miniscule. I think you could gain more of an effect for some of your sentences if you split this into paragraphs, segmenting after important points. Also I think you mean 'perish' instead of 'parish' at the end.

For some reason I imagined this being read out through a megaphone or over speakers through a highschool.

Anyway, keep writing!

This should be like a speech or something, it's so honest and true. I swear, you should do something that deserves a speech, and use this as that speech, because it's so motivational

Wow - I agree and this was powerfully written...even if I imagined it read in Tyler Durden's voice :-D

Bravo!