The format of it has gotten a lot better, reads very smooth. A bit of the specifics are hard to take in all at once but very good depth and variations to the types and so on.

Very good, i smell some drama coming. Good way to give things a nice twist. A few little errors here and there, probably minor editing skip overs. I get that a lot myself. Doesn't hurt to read it over again though and catch 'em. So far so good.

Very good, the imagery was excellent with the descriptions, I have a bit of trouble picturing what Misti and Redrick look like but it wasn't any big deal. Part of the job of the reader is supposed to figure that out for himself. But a little description couldn't hurt. The powers seem interesting as well does the setting. You drew me in well, should be good. You definitely have a knack for writing.

This is really good...