|Reviews for The Hot, new guy|
| dawnita 7/9/12 . chapter 2
Connor is so ... weird. haha! i mean the first part was so funny! and he called himself gorgeous! LOL. i could imagine him holding up a mirror and staring at himself and stuff :)
your story is really cute! i'm not sure what Connor is! what did he mean by not falling for her! i need to read the next chapter!
P.S. i'm so sorry! i reeeally just have to point this out:
All the way to English class I kicked her heals, the first time just lightly with the top of my shoe; she kept going. [I think you meant heel not heal]
| dawnita 7/9/12 . chapter 1
this was really cute! i'm not sure what type of character Casey is ... if she's shy and what not. but i like Connor, he's funny :)
P.S. um, i'm sorry, i couldn't help myself but i noticed some typographical errors and i hope it's okay if i point them out :) i'm kind of a detail person. haha! but these are just my suggestions. you could ignore them, and stuff, you're the writer after all!
you had an extra quotation mark here:
"C-Casey." I managed to stammer out."
"Good for you?" "And just so you know, that's two colors."
and i think you could edit this sentence:
I waited patiently for the bell to ring in my desk, scribbling down a bit of homework I hadn't yet finished. [It's like the bell is on her desk ... So it would probably better if it was: Scribbling down a bit of homework I hadn't finished yet, I waited patiently in my desk for the bell to ring.]
this was really good though! and i think i'm going to love this story!
| JJsMommy29 7/9/12 . chapter 14
i was so hoping that Conner would over here there conversation so update soon and keep up the amazing work can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter
| QueenofLove 7/9/12 . chapter 14
She is a bitch. And I really don't like her..she needs to get punched. in the face. hard.
I don't think I could have stayed at that table all through lunch...though if I did i'd have done the same thing Casey, think of ways to murder Mandy.
Quite amazing chapter! I need more.
| Guest 7/9/12 . chapter 1
i like it a lot please keep writing!
| sailorsweetart 7/9/12 . chapter 14
Well, can you blame us for desping Mandy's existence? She's so mean :o
This chapter was well written! But everyone is so cruel to Casey x( How does she take it?
Update soon :D
| Allthegoodnamesaregone 7/9/12 . chapter 13
Don't make me come up there! Make an up an update or I'll...I've run out threats! Oh no! I'll be back!
| QueenofLove 7/9/12 . chapter 13
Aww I think I could actually cry right now...
But this is a really good story, and I would really love some more to read! Pleaseeeee, soon.
| QueenofLove 7/9/12 . chapter 4
It's kind of nice reading from a players point of view, no matter how depressing it is for me...I mean players aren't nice. But yet, it's interesting.
| QueenofLove 7/9/12 . chapter 2
So..this is a game to him? That's very depressing for me...
| KendallWritesBooks 7/8/12 . chapter 13
I care! This is so good! Don't let anything or anyone discourage you because youre an awesome writer! Write even if no one reads it for crying out loud! :)
| SimranVim 7/8/12 . chapter 13
How can he be angry at he for leaving him so she could get picked up by her mom?
| beverlyamethyst16 7/8/12 . chapter 13
Awwwhhhhhh... I don't HATE conner, I understand he is slightly confused about his feelings for Casey. Nice chapter btw
Please update soon!
| colbyjackchz 7/7/12 . chapter 13
Oooo I want more :DD
| LoverofBach 7/7/12 . chapter 13
this babe, (uhhh Mandy?) Was actually talking to me, I know
Should be (uhhh Mandy?) was actually talking to me. I know
they weren't actually the closest of friends.
Should be "they weren't exactly the closet of friends" actually isn't used in that context.
it well, I would give her a B
This sentence is a run-on, period after well.
and a nod to
Should be "nodding at"
Hey you have a couple more sentence errors/grammar and continuity issues. If you need a Beta, I can do it!
I really liked the intimacy between Connor/Casey. Even though Conner is a jerk! Meh! Anyway great chapter!