This is so tragic, but reality for a lot of people. Beautifully written, the rhyme scheme was well structured [somewhat unusual choice of rhyme, but I like to see variation :)] and the ending was gorgeous in a somewhat dark way. Keep writing, it's obvious you have talent :)

I see you played with different rhyming in this one and I quite enjoyed it. You didn't create this one in a thick hopelessness like your others. You created it like a cold hard fact and that was pretty cool to see.

Nice

This made me sad and it makes me think.

riah, won't you believe me? you're like my sister, you can't just NOT believe me...

You know, the probability of you surviving after cardiac arrest was 6.5 out of a hundred. It really amazing that you're still alive! X3

Oooh. This is very haunting in a way, I must say. I liked it. It's not normally the scene that people would put into a poem, but I liked it for that reason. It's unique and well written. Good work! X