|Reviews for Holding Her|
| Small Wings Flying 7/16/12 . chapter 1
I like the melodious tone of this because it gives the lull of a sad lullaby of sorts, or one of those speeches you give in funeral. A nice gentle sadness hull which really suits the context it's in as opposed to something looser and harder.
I don't like this line [Her body remains as beautiful as a swan.] because it's too long and breaks the rhythm. "beautiful as" seems unnecessary.
| Dr. Nonsense 6/8/12 . chapter 1
(FP is being stupid and won't let me sign in)
So. This poem is beautifully written. I really liked it. Keep up the good work. :-) Oh. You should pm me. Thanks and keep up the good work.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny 6/5/12 . chapter 1
Another good one. Strong start.
| blackabyss1 6/1/12 . chapter 1
That was actually quite good.
| alexithymic 5/31/12 . chapter 1
Good job, very sad and morbid. Yet the last line...what was it... "I will just move on like a pawn." That seems too rhyme-y to me. If you had said something more like "I have no hopes of moving on" I would've liked it a bit better. (I'm a fan of drama!)
-Keep up the good work! :)